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Battle of Atlanta[edit]

Nominator(s): Guoguo12--Talk-- 


I am nominating this article for A-Class review because I believe that it's ready for review (redundant, really). I helped bring this article from Start-Class to its current GA status and I am confident it meets at least most of the A-Class criteria. Guoguo12--Talk--  20:41, 16 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I am not reviewing the article, as I don't do A-class reviews, but I noticed that something is missing from this sentence: "Sherman settled into a siege of Atlanta, shelling the city and sending raids west and south of the city to cut off the supply lines from Macon, Georgia, resulting in the" (in the section on Siege and closure; quoted in its entirety). I presume that the rest of the sentence was lost inadvertently in an edit. PKKloeppel (talk) 18:00, 20 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
 Fixed. Thanks for pointing that out; it was my fault entirely. In this edit, I added "resulting in the" to the end and forgot to add the result (i.e., that the battles over the supply lines made up the remainder of the Atlanta Campaign). Interestingly, the blunder slipped through GA review. Guoguo12--Talk--  12:06, 21 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

  • I don't think you need both citations on the casualties in the infobox.
    •  Fixed. I kept the print reference, and also left a hidden comment noting the existence of possible further references.
  • The images mention Ponder House but its not mentioned in the text.
    •  Done. Used web source, though.
  • The images were too scrunched together; I moved them around slightly.
    • Thanks.
  • I think the Siege section needs to be expanded - instead of your summary ...remaining battles of the campaign were fought over supply routes, you should list each battle with a date, culminating in the battle of Lovejoy Station which expelled the confederate forces from Atlanta. I think this is preferable than a further information/see also link in the heading.
    • Really? There are six battles. I think it'll make things to complicated and possibly off topic.
      • The siege section kind of puts this off topic but I think its important to show that the seige consisted of those 6 battle - maybe someone else has an opinion. Kirk (talk) 01:40, 25 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • I also think the battle section should be expanded.
    •  I'll see what I can do......
  • A map would be nice to add. Kirk (talk) 22:18, 21 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Comments: I made all the following edits (if there were edits to make); feel free to revert. - Dank (push to talk) 04:42, 6 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

  • "were extensively covered by Northern newspapers, significantly boosted Northern morale, and Lincoln was reelected by a large margin.": See WP:MHCL#series. Changed "boosted" to "boosting".
  • "Hood, with his vastly outnumbered army, was faced with two problems. First, he needed to defend the city of Atlanta, which was a very important rail hub and industrial center for the Confederacy. Second, his army was small in comparison to the enormous armies that Sherman commanded.": "Hood needed to defend the city of Atlanta, which was an important rail hub and industrial center for the Confederacy, but his army was small in comparison to the armies that Sherman commanded." See WP:MHCL#conciseness.
  • "If successful, Hood could later on surround the Union troops and win the battle.": It's not clear what the word "successful" refers to; see WP:Checklist#dangling. "Hood intended to surround the Union troops." - Dank (push to talk) 13:59, 6 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Major General McPherson": "Maj. Gen. McPherson". See WP:Checklist#consistency.
  • Please check "The remaining battles of the Atlanta Campaign were fought over these supply routes." "resulting" was dangling. - Dank (push to talk) 15:56, 6 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • I don't cover sourcing, but from the little I saw, I'm not convinced that everything in the article is exactly right, so I'll hold off on supporting until others have taken a whack at this. Thanks for trying our A-class review; I hope it's helpful. - Dank (push to talk) 16:18, 6 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]
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