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Rehab (Amy Winehouse song)

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I've listed this article for peer review because over time, it has really started to come together. This was obviously one of the most lauded/controversial/famous tunes of last year, and it matters that this article is done well.

Thanks, Esprit15d • talk • contribs 14:12, 25 March 2008 (UTC)

Comments from The Rambling Man (talk · contribs)

Firstly as a general rule the article needs to use British English, it currently seems to be US English (e.g. recognizes). Specific things to consider...

• Expand the lead per WP:LEAD - at least two paragraphs for an article of this length.
• Background final two paragraphs too short, either expand or merge.
• "In November 2006, an early demonstration version lacking the horn section and originally played on Mark Ronson's East Village Radio show was released in the iTunes Store." needs citation.
• "The band is dressed in gowns " "The band members are dressed in gowns..." sounds a bit better to me.
• "On May 31," which year?
• " jumped a massive " - POV.
• Half of the Commercial section needs referencing.
• UK R&B Singles Chart doesn't have a reference.
• " have sprung up" - not particularly encyclopaedic.
• "pop singer Justin Timberlake would the song's chorus " word missing here?
• Fix the [citation needed] tag.
• If you insist on keeping the succession boxes, at least merge them.
• You have one dead link when I checked - use this to help.

That's it! The Rambling Man (talk) 14:15, 27 March 2008 (UTC)

Comments from Efe (talk · contribs)

• In favor of the prose, please put the charts and lists after the Notable appearances in the media section.
• The alternate cover adds nothing to the article, and its non-free. Use them if they're extensively discussed in the article.
• Please supply the copyright information of this image: Image:Amy Winehouse - Rehab.jpg, as well as Image:WinehouseRehab.ogg.

I was actually planning to revamp this article and pass to FAC, but I just stumbled on PR today and found this. I will help, instead. --Efe (talk) 10:58, 31 March 2008 (UTC)

Comments from Indianescence (talk · contribs)

• Did not review the article completely, but the statistical data and the sales number are unsourced.
• I know that the article is small, so the lead should not be very long. But i feel this is way too short. Something about the songs impact would be great.

Thank You. Indianescence (talk) 05:52, 4 April 2008 (UTC)