Wikipedia:Peer review/Milpitas, California/archive2

Milpitas, California[edit]

There was a former peer review at Wikipedia:Peer review/Milpitas, California/archive1, but unfortunately it was unsuccessful.

Please take a look at the article and comment on where it needs to be improved, and how we could make it into a featured article. The Milpitas article looks great but looks like it still needs work. Milpitas guy 19:02, 15 October 2005 (UTC)[reply]

There are several improvements that I could immediately see, though there could be more:

Convert the various lists to prose if possible. Otherwise, move those lists to sub-articles.
Move the current form of the history section into a sub-article and place a summary in its place.
Focus only on institutions that are based in Milpitas, notably in the media section. For instance, you could simply say that the city is served by television stations in San Francisco and San Jose instead of placing a list of all stations viewable in Milpitas.
Make sure that there are no repeating pieces of information (something that I saw with the "see also" section, where several of the links were repeated in other sections).

I'll probably look into the article in more detail later. Pentawing 00:05, 16 October 2005 (UTC)[reply]