User talk:K.wilson
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Hello, K.wilson, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Ian and I work with the Wiki Education Foundation; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.
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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 02:58, 15 January 2017 (UTC)
Introduction[edit]
Hello, my name is Jherrica and I am a Human Development and Family Studies major applying for nursing school. I'm taking IAH 209 to ccomplete my last prerequisite for Undergrad at MSU. I hope your semester is going well!Byrdojhe (talk) 04:51, 24 January 2017 (UTC)
Improvements[edit]
In the first section titled, “History”, you begin talking about a man named Ellie Metchnikoff. You then immediately talk about his work which he was known for, “phagocytosis”. I don’t believe many viewers of this page will know the meaning of that word and in turn, it will be a bit difficult for them to be able to make sense of the whole paragraph without knowing the main premise of his work. I think it would be beneficial to add a bit of information concerning this topic.K.wilson (talk) 20:58, 10 April 2017 (UTC)
Also in the “History” section, the death and dignity movement is cited as a reason for an increase in the interest in thanatology. Personally, I don’t know anything about that particular movement so it might be beneficial to give a very brief description of what that entailed and why people became more concerned with thanatology as a result of it. It is better to assume the reader doesn’t know a lot about the topic.. K.wilson (talk) 20:58, 10 April 2017 (UTC)
In the “Goals” section of the article, in the last paragraph it is written that thanatology has come a long way and is very prominent. There isn’t any information about the prominence of this. Some statistics may be helpful that depict the rise in education about death in universities over time. Also, I think that there could be more information added to the “Forensic Science” section of the article it seems like there is more information on this topic.K.wilson (talk) 20:58, 10 April 2017 (UTC)
In the “Coping with Death” section I noticed a couple things that could be improved. The word ‘wellbeing” should be hyphenated like such, well-being. One sentence says “one coming myth” when it should be “one common myth”. Another says ‘pay an enormous medical bills’ so, the ‘s’ on bill should be removed. Also, there’s a phrase in the section that says, “supporting their loved ones who is nearing the end of their day”, I think better grammar and word choice could make this better by saying, “supporting their loved ones who are passing away.” K.wilson (talk) 20:58, 10 April 2017 (UTC)