Template:Did you know nominations/Mansoor al-Jamri

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The result was: promoted by Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:31, 29 June 2013 (UTC)

Mansoor al-Jamri[edit]

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... ~~that human rights activist Mansoor al-Jamri, the son of a Shia cleric is married to a Sunni woman of "Western tastes"?~~

Reviewed: Gray's Almshouses, Taunton
Comment: I might have surpassed 5 expansion margin a bit.

5x expanded by Mohamed CJ (talk). Self nominated at 15:00, 16 June 2013 (UTC).

There should be a comma after "cleric", but I am more worried about mentioning his wife's "Western tastes". It might be a bit too ambiguous, especially since we are dealing with two living persons. Is it not possible to come up with a hook related to his career, a hook related to something he is notable for? I see no issues with the article itself - which is a significant achievement, as articles related to the Middle East tend to have POV issues. Surtsicna (talk) 18:12, 17 June 2013 (UTC)

Thank you. You're right and your concerns are legitimate; the hook is by far not the best fact to pick. How about? ALT1 ... that despite writing moderate columns and playing the role of the mediator, Mansoor al-Jamri was not spared from the effects of the Bahraini uprising?
Feel free to make grammar/style tweaks. Also, we have a free image File:Mansoor al-Jamri in July 2011.jpg. Mohamed CJ (talk) 20:31, 17 June 2013 (UTC)

The alternative hook is, without a doubt, better than the original one. If nothing else, it's hookier! As for the image, would you like to nominate it as well? Surtsicna (talk) 21:37, 17 June 2013 (UTC)

@Surtsicna: Yes for the image. You are very nice, thank you. Mohamed CJ (talk) 23:09, 17 June 2013 (UTC)

I've added it for you. You are welcome, of course. Best of luck with the nomination! Surtsicna (talk) 23:23, 17 June 2013 (UTC)

I apologize for forgetting the tick. Surtsicna (talk) 17:29, 29 June 2013 (UTC)