Talk:T. J. Warren

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Help needed for image[edit]

We would really appreciate if someone could help us get a image for the article. Thanks.

In-class peer review[edit]

Some of the career paragraphs sound like its bragging, not quite encyclopedia sounding. Try re-wording the sentences to be more neutral. Sources seem reputable and reliable. Cyranoghc (talk) 16:49, 7 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

This line, "Within a week, Warren scored 36 points against UNC and then 41 points against Pittsburgh.", towards the end of awards and honors seems kind of out of place an pointless to me, as it is not an actual award.
The article could possibly benefit from listing some academic information too. Major, etc...
In Freshman year it is mentioned that he was placed on the ACC All Freshman team. But, this is not mentioned under Awards. It might be worth mentioning there too.
Ptncsu12 (talk) 16:51, 7 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

First draft feedback for COM 257 students[edit]

This feedback concerns the article generally, but is intended in particular for students in COM 257 at NCSU during the spring 2014 semester. It is based on this version from 27 March 2014. The problems and suggestions below will cover many aspects of the page including but not limited to writing quality, spelling and grammar, tone, number and quality of sources, extent of source use or misuse, citation style, formatting, layout, wikimarkup errors, stylistic issues, media use, and organization. Some will be straightforward while others will be more general or may require you to do some research into Wikipedia policies and guidelines for content, layout, sourcing, etc. Technical help for Wikipedia is easy to find here and all over the web. If all else fails, just Google your question and you'll almost certainly find answers. If you search and still have trouble (once you search), email me. Several of the items below point to specific examples, but should be generalized throughout the article.

Lead
  • Father doesn't seem needed up at the top (unless his father was a major sports figure that lent to his son's notability for the purposes of Wikipedia). Keep it, but move it elsewhere.
  • Wolfpack's basketball team - just Wolfpack is probably most succinct -- we already know he's a basketball player
  • Is there a more time-specific way of stating his ACC scoring lead? Sometimes articles don't get updated, so informatino like this can fall out of date. Maybe combine it with the following sentence?
  • "currently" not needed before "projected"
High school career
  • "Before attending Brewster Academy" -- we don't know yet that he attended Brewster Academy
  • "loaded Word of God squad" - more descriptive
  • small forward doesn't need to be capitalized
  • "some of which were" → "including"
  • remove spaces between end of sentence punctuation and reference footnote
  • seeing here and elsewhere several opportunities for more wikilinks
  • the last sentence sounds like it belongs earlier
College career
  • "a 8 seed" → "the number 8 seed" or "an 8 seed" if that's more appropriate
  • Sophomore season looks like a good place to talk about his father (from the lead)
  • combine tlast two sentences of first sophomore season paragraph
  • career highs in? or "of?"
  • should "Player of the year" be capitalized as it is later? (also, wikilink only the first instance of a term on the page)
  • seems like you could find more sources for his entry into the draft
Awards and honors
  • You may be able to make this into a second level section (rather than subordinate to college career).
General/misc
  • One of the references is broken. I see {{cite web...
Media use
  • The image used is currently set to be deleted on March 31 if evidence of permission to use it isn't provided. What's the status? Have you found any others? --Ryan McGrady (talk) 12:56, 28 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]