Talk:Pitru Paksha/GA1

GA Review[edit]

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Reviewer: S Masters (talk) 08:30, 12 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for criteria)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
References appear to be in order.
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
Article conforms to WP:NPOV.
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
Article appears to be stable.
It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Images are correctly tagged and properly captioned.
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

Comments:

There are excessive amount of bold copy throughout. Please see MOS:TEXT of what should be bold.

Per MOS:TEXT, article title and synonyms and Definition lists are bolded. --Redtigerxyz ^Talk 12:35, 12 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I can, just, accept the "when and where" as a glossary, but strictly speaking, it is not.

Hyphens have been used instead of dashes. Please see MOS:DASH.

En dashes and spaced En dashes are now used. --Redtigerxyz ^Talk 12:35, 12 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

There is a note in the Reference section. This should be in a Note section.

Renamed to Notes. This scheme is followed by many books. --Redtigerxyz ^Talk 12:35, 12 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

This is not what I meant. There was a note in the references section, so there should be both a notes and a references section. The note was: The days of Pitru-paksha are same according to the Gregorian calendar, but Pitru Paksha is the dark fortnight of Bhadrapada in the Hindu calendar called Shalivahana era that begins with month Chitra and has months beginning with the bright fortnight, but it is the dark fortnight of Ashwin in the Vikram Samwat calendar beginning on the month Vishakha with months beginning on the dark fortnight. References should remain as it was, and another section called Notes added. -- S Masters (talk) 13:33, 12 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

There are terms which are unexplained, such as darbha grass.

grass is the explanation for darbha. Darbha is a kind of grass. Could not find a wiki-article for it. Any other jargon terms? --Redtigerxyz ^Talk 12:35, 12 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Numbers greater than nine should be written numerically, see MOS:NUM.

Please clarify where this applies. --Redtigerxyz ^Talk 12:37, 12 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

the fourteenth for people killed by arms, in a war or suffered a violet death but since it is in the "glossary", you can leave it as it is. -- S Masters (talk) 13:33, 12 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

There are numerous grammar issues. Example: Offerings to the ancestors made both in homes as well as puja mandaps, Families may also journey pilgrimage places like Varanasi and Gaya to perform Shraddha, and Gaya considered sacred to perform shraddhas, holds a fair in Pitru Paksha. Please have a proper copy done on the whole article before submitting to GAN.
There are also prose issues: Some families also... Some families also...'.

Summary: The article has numerous issues as listed above, in particular, language and MoS compliance. Unfortunately, in its current form, it is far from being close to the quality required for Good Article status. I suggest a full copy edit by an editor that can correct such errors. You might like to try to ask someone from WP:GOCE. I will allow seven days for these issues to be resolved, before making any decision.

My issues have been addressed. Yes it could do with a fresh pair of eyes, I think the above is actually a typo error missing vital words. Dr. Blofeld ^{White cat} 17:04, 13 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Comment — Page ranges need fixing. pp is used for single pages and both 112–6 and 61–64 are used. Aaroncrick ^TALK 20:50, 13 April 2010 (UTC)User:YellowMonkey[reply]

Thanks to Dr. Blofeld, we have a new image too. Page numbers done. User:YellowMonkey also did a copyedit. --Redtigerxyz ^Talk 05:09, 14 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for all your hard work. We are nearly there. Just one more item to be fixed. "A shraddha ritual performed on this day is considered as fruitful as one conducted in the holy city of Gaya, which is seen as a special place to perform the rite, and hosts a fair during the Pitru Paksha period.[2][4][3][9]" - There is no need to have so many references for one sentence. If the references refer to other sentences, then put each reference at the appropriate sentence. If they all refer to the one sentence then just pick the two best ones and remove the rest. -- S Masters (talk) 03:18, 17 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Done. --Redtigerxyz ^Talk 10:27, 17 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Final summary: Thank you for all your hard work. I am now satisfied that the article meets all the requirements for a Good Article, and I am happy to pass it. -- S Masters (talk) 10:45, 17 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]