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The song was released as the second single from The Nightfly in January 1983 through Warner Bros. Records. → The song was released as the second single from the album in January 1983 through Warner Bros. Records. (we already know which one).
Musically, the song contains elements of jazz and funk. → If it contains elements it means it is influenced by, not its genre. Now according to the RS source it is the song's genre. Threfore; Musically, the song has been described as jazz-funk.
The song received acclaim from music critics → could use a little more description. Since "Billboard labeled it a top single pick" and "one of Fagen's most delightful tunes." something like this would prove your point.
Use {{spaced ndash}} so there is space on both sides.
"t was less successful on the charts than its predecessor, however, reaching number 70 on the Billboard Hot 100 in the US. It performed better in the Netherlands, reaching number 47." → First of all, when I check the other song, it has no chart information and Fagen doesn't have a discography page for his solo work. Secondly "however, it reached number 70 on the Billboard Hot 100 in the US." Finally, please see below since there is some issue regarding a chart section.
Here you have the composition section mixed with the background.
I would suggest the fusion of a background and release section.
The narrator of the song is a "gawky teenager circa 1962." He has also been described as a "wannabe hipster." → The narrator of the song is a "gawky teenager circa 1962", who has also been described as a "wannabe hipster."
He meets a girl → The narrator meets a girl
He also holds big → The teenager also holds big
"four-note piano riff that functions as a sort of musical exclamation point to certain lines in the verses." → your own words along with some quote
"the music sounds as frenetic as the teenage hero's hormones, and its deliberately cheesy tone matches the kid's skin-deep sophistication. → same as previous
The music video continues the song's concept of a teenage hangout in a bomb shelter. → The music video continues the song's concept of a teenage romantic evening in a bomb shelter. Stick to your sources, hangout could be between friends, romance is not friends for sure.
Needs more description the video. What you say in the first sentence just summarizes it up.
Once the previous point is done I would consider doing a paragraph to divide the Reception of the music video from the synopsis. However, just paragraphs you don't need the subsections.
You miss a chart performance section. Only two, three lines in the charts in the "Charts" section would be good enough, since it didn't chart in many places.
Missing a composition section as well.
I have seen one live performance of this song, should be included as well.
I'm sorry but I don't think this is anywhere near GA material, not only it has some inconsistencies throughout the entire article, but also it is also not broad in coverage (quick fail). I will leave some articles with some yet few information regarding this song in order to expand this article in just a quick search in google.
Fagen’s liner notes from The Nightfly "The songs on this album represent certain fantasies that might have been entertained by a young man growing up in the remote suburbs of a northeastern city during the late fifties and early sixties, i.e., one of my general height, weight and build. D.F."
