Talk:Mamoru Miyano/GA1

GA Review[edit]

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Hello, I will be reviewing this article. Check back soon for a full review! CarpetCrawler^{message me} 19:58, 4 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]

GA on hold[edit]

Overall, the article looks good, but has some issues, mostly dealing with expansion.

- Could you expand the second paragraph of the lead? A good 1-2 more sentences will do it fine.

Done by a sectence.

- Wikify Mobile Suit Gundam 00, if such an article exists.

Done.

- "Signed to King Records, Miyano debuted in May 2007 with the single "Kuon" (久遠 ,Eternity?), which was used as the ending theme song for anime series Kōtetsu Sangokushi; it debuted at #47 on the Oricon charts." I'm not a very big fan of this sentence, the way it sounds. Especially the beginning. Would you be able to re-write it?

Rewrote.

- The article is a little too small. I see that he has done a lot of roles in various anime. Are any of these roles notable? If so, his more notable roles should also be mentioned in the article, with references. The "Acting career" section should be expanded with that information.

The only ones that are notable are the ones where he has won or was nominated for an award. Other than that his other roles aren't mentioned.

I'm guessing his other roles are not main characters, or recurring ones? CarpetCrawler^{message me} 20:48, 9 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]

- I see that there is no information about his early life. Where was he born? Did he always want to do voice acting? If so, did he attend schooling for such an occupation? Also, his personal life is mentioned in the lead, but not in the article. I'm sure a section could probably be made in the article, but bigger than the paragraph in the lead.

I searched and I haven't been able to find anything about his early life. Like his early life there is no information about his personal life either other than he got married and is expecting a child. I check both of his official sites but they don't help all they do is tell you his birthplace, birthday, height, weight and blood type.

Blood type?! I guess for if any emergency donors are needed. :P Talk about a trivial fact! CarpetCrawler^{message me} 20:48, 9 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]

- The "Musical career" section could also be expanded. What do the critics think of his music? Also, it says where the songs debuted, but was the debut the peak # for the songs?

I expanded it by adding one more release since I can't find any reviews on his music from critics. Many articles concerning Asian artists are like that. Yes, the debut was the peak for the songs. He is still new to the music entertainment so, that's the most I could do about that section.

OK, that sounds good. CarpetCrawler^{message me} 20:48, 9 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Until my concerns have been addressed, I will place this article on hold. Please leave me a message on my talkpage if you have any questions, or if you have addressed my concerns. Thanks, and good luck! CarpetCrawler^{message me} 05:58, 9 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Answered. 月 (Moon)と暁 (Sunrise) 06:56, 9 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Annnd I have responded! :D I am currently at work, so I will pass my final judgment on the nomination when I get home. See you then! CarpetCrawler^{message me} 20:48, 9 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]

GA pass[edit]

OK, I have thought about it for quite a while, and am going to give you the benefit of the doubt and pass this article, since it seems that it is indeed extremley hard to find certain information. In which case, this article has been passed, great job! CarpetCrawler^{message me} 05:19, 10 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]