Talk:Katrina Kaif/GA3

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Reviewer: Royroydeb (talk · contribs) 16:22, 14 May 2015 (UTC)

In my initial look, I found the following faults *Only Times of India site doubts her date of birth but the article says some sources?

• • Removed

* During a London show filmmaker Kaizad Gustad cast her - what the sentence tries to say is not clear. Try rewording.

• • Reworded
• with her mother's surname Turquotte (also spelt Turcotte) - clarification needed
  • The sources only say that she was born with the surname Turquotte and that her mother's name is Suzanne Turquotte. I have researched extensively, but there isn't any confirmation on how she was born with her mum's surname

I have also searched many sources, it is unclear of how it happened, so let it remain.

* when she was very young - vague

• • Reworded
• the timings of her relocations are not clear.
  • I've written what the source says. There isn't a detailed timeline of events unfortunately

@AB01: Since there are allegations of her fabricating her past, I would suggest you to add in this paragraph - "According to Kaif". Moreover it is an interview. You can also quote the source even in a blockquote if you think it is required. RRD13 দেবজ্যোতি (talk) 10:34, 26 May 2015 (UTC)

Rewritten in a blockquote

* paternal parentage have been questioned by some sources. - Again this some sources

• • Within that source itself, there are various people who question her background
• modelling as a teenager - specify
  • Reworded
• pirated VCDs of the film's uncut version were reportedly appearing on the black market. - What is its pertinence in the article?
  • Removed
• her performance was praised. - By whom?
  • Reworded
• Nikhat Kazmi - who is he?
  • He was already introduced above (Nikhat Kazmi of The Times of India)
• recognition of her acting ability. - Problem with neutrality persists
  • Removed
• Something more can surely be added about Sheila Ki Jawani
  • Added something about her training and preparation for the song
• since it was their first film together after their breakup. - Till now their is no mention of their relationship
  • Removed
• She reportedly visits - it sounds better if you write The Times of India reported in [year]....
  • Changed
• Did she really performed, I mean in the same performance with Akon?
  • Yep, that's what the source says. Plus, there's a picture showing her on stage with him
• is considered one of the most beautiful celebrities. - Who considers?
  • Reworded
• for three consecutive years beginning in 2008, and again in 2013. - The time gaps are not clear.
  • Reworded

*Unsourced filmography.

• • As far as I know, filmographies do not need to be sourced unless it has an article of its own, WP:FILMOGRAPHY. All the sourced are in the Career section anyway

It is in violation with the policies of WP:V, WP:IC and WP:BLP. RRD13 দেবজ্যোতি (talk) 13:34, 22 May 2015 (UTC)

WP:FILMOGRAPHY says that the sources "is an optional field that is to be used when a work may be obscure or difficult to confirm." None of her films are obscure. Also, if you look at featured articles like Reese Witherspoon and Emma Watson, the filmography tables have not been sourced, so I think it should be fine, no? AB01║TALK 01:33, 23 May 2015 (UTC)

The article has problem with the neutrality criteria. I will look into it again. I have not yet checked the references though.RRD13 দেবজ্যোতি (talk) 19:18, 18 May 2015 (UTC)

Some references just have the date some have date as well as accessdate. This needs to be fixed. Either add dates to all sources or remove them from all. Nothing in between. The checklinks says there is one dead link hereRRD13 দেবজ্যোতি (talk) 10:40, 26 May 2015 (UTC)

According to this, all websites need access dates, and publication dates should be added IF they're available. That's what I've done here. The dead link is fixed now. AB01║TALK 09:11, 27 May 2015 (UTC)

The 25 no reference about that John Abraham one opens into this. RRD13 দেবজ্যোতি (talk) 09:52, 27 May 2015 (UTC)

All the NDTV links are archived now AB01║TALK 11:46, 27 May 2015 (UTC)

*The no 8 source says "I grew up in London." However the article speaks else - "she is thought to have grown up in London"

• • Reworded
• "Kaif's Kashmiri descent and paternal parentage have been questioned by some sources" - The no 1 source says that some of the co actors and other cinema related people has doubted her parentage, not sources. Also the source doesnt say that her Kashmiri descent is questioned, it says her parentage is doubted.
  • Taken out the bit about her descent
• "received her first modelling assignment (a jewellery campaign)" - make it modelling assignment in a jewellery campaign
  • Reworded
• "working for several freelance agencies" - remove several, it does not specify, I remember it being a violation of MOS of words
  • Changed
• "Kaif received a reported ₹7.5 million" - million is not of the Indian system of counting, we do - tens, hundreds, thousands, lakhs, crores.
  • If you have a look at other FA's on Bollywood actors (eg. Kareena Kapoor Khan and Deepika Padukone), the numbers are written in millions and billions. I have a feeling there was a consensus on this, so it'd probably be best to leave it as is (it might be because this is the English wikpedia)
• "According to Sify, "Katrina is passably competent in a tailor-made role" - make it Sify wrote that Katrina was "passably competent in a tailor-made role..."
  • Reworded

RRD13 দেবজ্যোতি (talk) 09:04, 2 June 2015 (UTC)

• "they praised Kaif's performance." - again not going with the source, write what the source says - "Debasmita Ghosh of TOI says she " attracted positive reviews but also introduced the audience to her sizzling hot chemistry with Akshay Kumar."
  • Removed
• "Except for Boom, Namastey London and Singh is Kingg, Kaif's voice was dubbed over by voice artists in her early films because of her lack of fluency in Hindi and other Indian languages" - I dont watch much films, but I have watched Race, was it also dubbed? Because what does "early films" exactly means is not specified.
  • Reworded for ckarity. Yep, as far as I remember her voice was dubbed in Race too.
• "when one is wrongly detained after 9/11" - which one?
  • Reworded AB01║TALK 10:30, 5 June 2015 (UTC)

RRD13 দেবজ্যোতি (talk) 09:22, 5 June 2015 (UTC)