Talk:July 18, 1998, Albanian–Yugoslav border clashes/GA1
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Reviewer: FunkMonk (talk · contribs) 13:39, 7 March 2016 (UTC)
- Hi, I'll review this. FunkMonk (talk) 13:39, 7 March 2016 (UTC)
- The first sentence of the intro is very complex and information-packed, I'm wondering whether it could start out a bit "softer". Perhaps some of the info could be moved to a new sentence after the first one.
All done so far, FunkMonk. 23 editor (talk) 01:31, 11 March 2016 (UTC)
- "who formed a majority there before the mid-19th century but by 1990 represented only about ten percent of the population." Will it be too much to briefly explain how this happened?
- "Once Kosovo's autonomy was abolished" Which was when?
- "fueling the Kosovar uprising that eventually erupted in the spring of 1998." Anything this can link to?
- "foreign mujahideen fighting" Could be explained what this means. "Foreign Islamist fighters" or some such, just to be completely clear.
- "subsequently seized by the authorities." Which authorities?
- "Over the course of the breakup of Yugoslavia and the Yugoslav Wars, a rump federation consisting of Serbia (including Kosovo) and Montenegro proclaimed itself the Federal Republic of Yugoslavia." Perhaps clarify whether this means it was a de-facto Serbian state?
- Was there no international reaction to the role of mujahideen in the clash?
- The intro doesn't explain that the Yugoslav Army was apparently a Serbian force. The article body doesn't make this clear either.
- All done, FunkMonk. Some points:
- "Once Kosovo's autonomy was abolished" (the article states this was in '89 just a few sentences earlier)
- "fueling the Kosovar uprising that eventually erupted in the spring of 1998" (unfortunately no article at present, if there were it would probably link to 1998 Kosovo summer offensive)
- "Was there no international reaction to the role of mujahideen in the clash?" (unfortunately I haven't been able to find any via Google, Newspapers.com, etc. The EU issued a condemnation but didn't explicitly mentioned the Islamists, though US officials were no doubt pleased given they had requested that the KLA limit the influence of foreign mujaheddin in their ranks).