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[1] (paywalled), video interview TWOrantulaTM (enter the web) 14:11, 23 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]

GA Review[edit]

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Nominator: Vrxces (talk · contribs) 08:01, 10 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: Shapeyness (talk · contribs) 22:49, 12 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]


Hi Vrxces, GA review is below :) Shapeyness (talk) 22:49, 12 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks, appreciate it. I understand one thing worth running by you is that a large chunk of the development section is cited from an in-game 'Development diary'. Happy to provide screens/transcript of source text if wanting to do a spot check. ＶＲＸＣＥＳ (talk) 23:27, 12 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Rate Attribute Review Comment
1. Well-written:
1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct. Mostly good, some minor comments below
1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation. Lead section adequately covers article content, article is arranged into sensible sections, no problems with biased language or editorialising
2. Verifiable with no original research, as shown by a source spot-check:
2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline.
2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose). Everything is cited inline and content is properly supported by citations
2c. it contains no original research. I couldn't see any details that obviously went beyond sourcing, no issues with synth
2d. it contains no copyright violations or plagiarism. Earwig shows copyright violation unlikely [2], I didn't see any problems with close paraphrasing
3. Broad in its coverage:
3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic. A relatively short article but it covers gameplay, plot, development + influences on the game, and critical reception. Some more details could possibly be gleaned from some other sources I found (see comments below), but no major aspects are missed out from the sources I read.
3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).
4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each. Praise and criticism are both covered where appropriate in the reception section, rest of the article is neutral and free of editorialisation
5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content. Both images have a suitable fair use rationale
6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions. Optionally, alt text would be beneficial
7. Overall assessment.

Some comments on prose:

  • who created the game as an inspiration of the bestiaries from Dungeons and Dragons and the mythology of legendary creatures - this wording is confusing, I think "with inspiration from" or "inspired by" would work better
  • Edge stated the game's interface, citing its "grainy" videos, "green-tinged images", and "crackly sounds", were a "potent setting for horror" and evocative of a "haunted quality" - splitting the sentence in half like this, combined with the use of the word "citing" before we find out what these things are being cited in support of, makes this hard to read. Maybe restructure so the citing clause is moved to the end, or perhaps change "citing" to "including".
  • Optionally, "Following a series of abandoned prototypes..." could be split into some shorter sentences - also, I couldn't see anything in the Game Developer source about abandoned prototypes but assuming good faith that this is covered in the art book (which sources mention includes details of the making of the game)
  • I saw some of the quotes had "well-done" even though the reviews said "well done", I didn't check all the other quotes with hyphens, can you make sure they are all accurate?

Here are some sources you could possibly draw from for more details / reviews, this is not required for the GA review as I didn't see any major details omitted but they may be useful:

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