Talk:Dan Castellaneta/GA1
GA Review[edit]
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My notes below are more of a nitpicky peer review than GA-hold-worthy notes. Please address (or ignore) them with common sense, give me a quick note here when you think you're done, and I'll promote the article pronto.
- Images: Okay
- Sources: There's a problem with the ref http://video.barnesandnoble.com/search/Interview.asp?CTR=583498 (the others check out).
- Removed.
- Other points of WP:GA? besides prose: All okay
- Disambiguate: "stage" in lead and "Courier News" in the refs
Lead:
- spun-off - probably doesn't need the hyphen
- The Simpsons -> The Simpsons
- Done and done.
Early life:
- He recalled ""We did parodies and sketches - see the quotation marks
- "He took a play writing class" - hyphenate to play-writing
- "A classmate recalled that he thought" - can probably be trimmed to "A classmate (first) thought"
- "Ullman later recalled that although there were flashier performances that night, Castellaneta made her cry and he was hired.[1]" - sounds like Ullman recalled that Castellaneta was hired, but this is not a matter or memory but of fact
- All fixed.
The Simpsons
- "nine to ten hour long recording sessions" - I am pretty sure that some hyphens belong there, but I don't know what would be the correct version. If you have an experienced writer-wikipedian at hand, he might be able to help out. Otherwise ignore this note.
- "Castellaneta identified his best belch and told the producers to make that the standard" - I guess this sentence wants to say that one stock belch was recorded so that Castellaneta never had to record a belch again, but the sentence doesn't make that clear
- The paragraph beginning with "Castellaneta also provides the voices for numerous other characters" repeats in several following sentences that Castellaneta voices the character, although the intro sentence of this paragraph already says so. For a better flow, the repeats can just be dropped under the assumption that the reader remembers the gist of the intro sentence.
- "Until 1998, Castellaneta was paid $30,000 per episode." - the right ref is probably the one from the next sentence, but this sentence can be considered as quite a claim and should be ref'ed directly (again).
- "In the early '90s," - why not write out the year to 1990s?
- "They pitched their idea to show runner Al Jean and although he liked the story, but felt that it was too similar to a script the writers were already working on, "Duffless", so he turned it down" - something sounds wrong here grammar-wise
- Fixed.
Further career
- "In 1991 he played" - comma after year
- "In 1992, he guest starred in an episode" - hyphenate guest-starred
- "In 2007 he appeared" - comma
Awards
- Is it common practice to not source tables after the info in the tables has already been ref'ed in prose elsewhere?
- In a FL you would likely be required to ref every row, but I thought it would be okay here since it would mostly be the same one.