Talk:Airbus A380/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: ---Dough4872 15:35, 8 November 2009 (UTC)
Comments:

1. Superjumbo links to a disambiguation page and is probably unnecessary to link.
2. The lead of the article does not need to be cited unless that information is unique in the article. Also, the lead is supposed to be a summary of the information to be presented in the article.

Made several changes, only one reference remaining, advise if more changes are necessary.

1. "The aircraft’s final configuration was frozen" sounds awkward.

Reworded

1. "New wider roads, canal systems and barges were developed to deliver the A380 parts": add "and" in between "new" and "wider".
2. Can you combine the standalone sentence at the end of the Production section with the prior paragraph?
3. Citation needed for "The aircraft flew from Toulouse with 474 Airbus employees on board, in the first of a series of flights to test passenger facilities and comfort. In November 2006, a further series of route proving flights took place to demonstrate the aircraft's performance for 150 flight hours under typical airline operating conditions."
4. In sentence "This caused overall configuration management problems, at least in part because wiring harnesses manufactured using aluminium rather than copper conductors necessitated special design rules including non-standard dimensions and bend radii: these were not easily transferred between versions of the software", change the colon to a semicolon.
5. "delivery would slip by six months" sounds awkward, change to delivery would be delayed by six months".
6. Debold terms in the Overview section.
7. In sentence "This enables the widespread use of laser beam welding manufacturing techniques[107] — eliminating rows of rivets and resulting in a lighter, stronger structure.", citation should be moved to the end of sentence.
8. In sentence "It eliminates the bulky manuals and charts traditionally carried by pilots, the NSS has enough inbuilt robustness to eliminate onboard backup paper documents.", change comma to semicolon.
9. In sentence "Singapore Airlines offers twelve partly-enclosed first-class suites on its A380, each featuring one full and one secondary seat, a full-sized bed, desk, personal storage.", add "and" after last comma.
10. "COO John Leahy", delink COO to not have two touching wikilinks.
11. Is there a citation available for the Orders and deliveries by year table?
12. Can you add a citation for the unsourced statement in the Operators table?

I am placing the article on hold. ---Dough4872 15:35, 8 November 2009 (UTC)

The article looks good now, so I will pass it. ---Dough4872 15:45, 9 November 2009 (UTC)