Wikipedia:WikiProject Biography/Peer review/Peter Roskam

Peter Roskam[edit]

Greetings. This Peer Review has been created for the Peter Roskam article.

Currently, The Peter Roskamis running for the Illinois 6th district for congress. This race as proved to be very contentious race with the democratic Nominee, Tammy Duckworth running for the open congressional seat this November 2006.

I have requested this review, due to the edit wars and NPOV disputes, and bias editing that now plagues this article. The Editors would appear to have a political agenda. This article needs to be right, conforming to the standards of WP:BLP and WP:NPOV. Since it is a hotly contested race, there needs to be a better cross section of Wikieditors and/Administrators reviewing and correcting, this article, so that, it may conform to Wikipedia policy for Biography for Living Persons as will as Neutral Point of View.

Thanks Chitownflyer 14:36, 17 September 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Plange[edit]

At the time of my reading it, it seemed NPOV to me. I made some minor fixes, but here's some things I'd recommend:

Expand lead per WP:LEAD
Too many short one-sentence paragraphs
Too many one-paragraph sections, combine into a parent heading
The Notes section needs to be cleaned up -- you have very few web citations that have the full citation (title, publisher, date, access date)

--plange 21:23, 17 September 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Yannismarou[edit]

Plange got most of the problems. As far as the POV issues are concerned, I think the article has no major NPOV issues, although I'm not familiar with the American political life. I saw the last debate has to do with a link. This is definitely a versus-Roskam link, but this is not a problem, if pro-Roskan sites or his official site with his own views contradicting the accusations are also mentioned. A few more remarks:

Section "2006 Congressional campaign" faces serious prose-problems. It needs rewriting; right now it seems like a list of chronologies and events.
Sub-sections in section "Positions" need merger or expansion. Have in mind that in this section you can also mention critics of Roskam's positions, respecting, of course, the NPOV policies of Wikipedia.--Yannismarou 17:35, 18 September 2006 (UTC)[reply]