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Toyota Matrix

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I've listed this article for peer review because while not all that long, I think this article is one of the better written ones that I've seen (that wasn't reviewed) and would like to see what it lacks to become a featured article.

Thanks, Flash176 (talk) 20:14, 24 July 2008 (UTC)

Ruhrfisch comments: Very briefly, here are some suggestions for improvement. If you want more comments, please ask here.

• The article is too short - one of the FA criteria is comprehensiveness and this is too short to be comprehensive. A model article is useful for ideas and examples to follow - there are several car brand FAs at Wikipedia:WikiProject_Automobiles/Featured_articles that may be good models.
• The lead should be an accessible and inviting overview of the whole article. My rule of thumb is to include every header in the lead in some way but the only two section headers (First and second generation) are not explicitly in the lead. Please see WP:LEAD
• Abbreviations should be explained before their first use, so NUMMI and SEMA and perhaps others need to be explained as CUV already is
• One thing that seems to be missing is any sort of info on reception - what sales have the years had, what have auto reviews said about this?

Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). Yours, Ruhrfisch _><>°^° 01:34, 30 July 2008 (UTC)