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Spirited Away[edit]

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I've listed this article for peer review because I am intending to get the article up to GA/FA status. So far, this article is looking good, but I would like to have positive feedback on how should I improve the article. The film has won numerous awards and was acclaimed internationally. The objective is to get the article as the main page for TFA for the film's 15th anniversary, which is July 7, 2016.

Thanks, Lord Sjones23 (talk - contributions) 17:34, 14 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]

My first impression: Too many genres listed in the lead sentence. It makes the sentence run on and confusing. Suggest shortening it to stick to the primary genres, which seem to be anime and fantasy: "...is a 2001 Japanese anime fantasy film...". Second impression: Plot summary is too long at 12 paragraphs and 757 words. WP:FILMPLOT recommends 400–700 words for plot summaries of feature films, with simpler plots aiming for the lower end of that range with the upper range intended more for complex plots. This film doesn't seem to have a very complex plot, so I recommend some critical editing to get it down to about 500–550 words in maybe 4 medium-length paragraphs, which would seem an appropriate length for summarizing this story. Those are just my initial, at-a-glance thoughts. The rest of the article looks pretty good on first impression. --IllaZilla (talk) 18:12, 14 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Nomination has been withdrawn due to Richard Wagner peer review still open at this time. I will nominate it for PR again when the Wagner discussion is closed. Lord Sjones23 (talk - contributions) 03:21, 17 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]