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I've been making adjustments to this page for a while now. I've cleaned up all the references, found additional content to include (primarily music industry certification awards), and made minor adjustments to the format. I'm considering nominating the article to be a featured list but would like some general feedback fist. My only major concern is the quality of the lead. – Zntrip 00:05, 22 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Brianboulton comments: No queries with the tables, which look fine. A few comments on the lead:_

  • Why is the listing in the first paragraph of the lead in a different sequence from the infobox list, which is different again from the order in which the tables appear in the article?
    •  Done – Zntrip 20:15, 29 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  • Why not follow the MOS guideline which indicates that numbers with a value of 10 or more should be written numerically (14, 11, 10)?
    •  Done – Zntrip 20:15, 29 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  • There is a close repeat mid-lead of the word "major". The second is not really necessary, but could be replaced with, e.g. "considerable"
    •  Done I removed the second use of the word. – Zntrip 20:15, 29 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  • "2 million" rather than "2.0 million"
    •  Not done The zero in "2.0" is a significant figure and demonstrates the precision of the number. The actual number is 2,065,000, but in this case it is rounded down. – Zntrip 20:15, 29 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  • The word "forthcoming" is redundant when you say the album is expected to be released in late 2010. (I would shorten this to "due for release").
    •  Done – Zntrip 20:15, 29 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  • One other point: the toolbox on the right is indicating that the link in ref 35 is dead, although I have no problem accessing it. Check it out.
    •  Done I have no problem either; I'm not too sure why it's showing an error. – Zntrip 20:15, 29 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]

That's all I have. Looks pretty well ready for FLC. Brianboulton (talk) 18:48, 29 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for looking at the article, your suggestions helped out a lot. – Zntrip 20:15, 29 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]
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