Wikipedia:Peer review/Luton/archive1

Luton[edit]

Any help and advice on re-stucturing the article and tieing it into the areas of Luton (eg Bury Park, Leagrave, Etc) would be helpful. Other ideas for what else is needed to bring the article upto a 'good status'.GazMan7 11:01, 13 November 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Please see automated peer review suggestions here. Thanks, AZ _t 00:05, 14 November 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Please see recently improved article Weymouth for inspiration. - Tutmosis 01:14, 14 November 2006 (UTC)[reply]

A few points that came to mind:

- The lead section seems much too long. The table of contents after the first paragraph, instead of after half a dozen of them, would look much more attractive.
- The pictures could be slightly better placed; for example, I don't like having one right opposite the town crest, since it makes the start of the "History" section look cramped. Maybe move the town hall picture down to the left of the "20th century" section, thus tying in with the comment about the 1919 fire.
- The "Places within Luton" section seems a bit pointless, especially as there's an existing "Luton" category.

I hope that's of some use. Loganberry (Talk) 12:09, 21 November 2006 (UTC)[reply]