Wikipedia:Peer review/Isambard Kingdom Brunel/archive1

Isambard Kingdom Brunel[edit]

Legendary engineer, I've started to 'reference' everything with the aim of getting it featured soon, comments very much appreciated before I back-reference the lot and submit for FAC. Thanks. --PopUpPirate 00:40, 18 February 2006 (UTC)[reply]

On its way to FA, but needs some work in a few places.
- Certain concepts or issues need to be explained more fully:
  1. The Thames Tunnel: who commissioned it, how has it been used (this is in the picture caption but should be in the article text).
  2. Did he marry? Have children? If so, talk about it; if not, say he did not.
  3. A little more on the his bridges wouldn't hurt; right now two of them are just mentioned. Years of construction would be good as well.
  4. Explain exactly how the atmospheric railway worked. I assume the train was drawn by means of a sliding stopper of some sort in the vacuum pipe, but explanation would be very useful.
- The "Legacy" section reads like a list. Smoothing that out would be nice.
- The panoramic picture of the two bridges is just confusing. It would be nice to have a good picture of one of those bridges, but in its current state, it's so distorted and confusing as to be useless.
- At several points you make judgements on his work, of the "greatest" or "significant" sort; this will draw fire on FAC; instead, just say "X says it is a significant" etc.
- Saved this for last because its the biggest. Footnotes, footnotes, footnotes! It sounds from your blurb above like you're starting to add them, but I just wanted to drive the point home: for FAC, do not leave yourself open to easy criticism; ideally, every judgement or little known fact should be specifically footnoted, there should be maybe one footnote per section indicating what source is the primary basis for that section.

Good work so far; keep it up! Robth^Talk 01:42, 18 February 2006 (UTC)[reply]