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A script has been used to generate a semi-automated review of the article for issues relating to grammar and house style; it can be found on the automated peer review page for May 2008.

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I've listed this article for peer review because… subsnative and important topic, but in desperate need of undivided attention from users --Briaboru (talk) 20:29, 29 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks, Briaboru (talk) 20:29, 29 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Peer review is intended for high-quality articles. --13 of Diamonds (talk) 08:41, 31 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Erm... no... it's also intended to help make articles into higher quality articles. I don't think your comment is particularly helpful, the article is not in anymore a bad state than most articles on wikipedia, and if a user doesn't get help in improving an article, then how can it improve? I have to say I find that kind of comment very unhelpful, and almost uncivil. SGGH ^speak! 10:51, 3 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

SGGH

I suggest:

Expand the lead per WP:LEAD.
Footnotes need to go after punctuation per WP:MOS
Merge some of these 2 line paragraphs together
You need to expand the footnotes, rather than [www.google.com] or www.google.com use [www.google.com Google] retrieved June 2 2008
Need to increase the number of citations, any statement made in the article needs to be cited ideally.
The end order of the sections needs to be (ideally) "notes/references" then "further reading/references" and then "external links"
Obviously all the citation needed tags and [citation needed] markers need to be furfilled.
Are there any suitable images?
you dont need to bold font the prose in the content section
"time limit/eligibility" I would suggest finding some alternative to the /

Thats all I can see at the moment, hope it helps. SGGH ^speak! 10:51, 3 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]