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Crystal Palace, London[edit]

This peer review discussion has been closed.

I've listed this article for peer review after performing some tidy-up and reorganisation of it. It still feels a bit short, but many related topics have their own pages that it would be inappropriate to duplicate, so advice on getting the amount of content for the article right would be appreciated. I'd like to gradually move the article towards GA status so any advice on where the article is falling short of the standards would be appreciated too.

Thanks, SheffGruff (talk) 18:17, 9 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Comments by Boson

  • Some statements still need references (see citation-needed tags).
  • Since this is a British topic (and the article uses DMY date format), I presume it is intended to be written in British English. The expression "named for" is used. That should perhaps be changed to "named after".
  • Images: The captions that do not contain compete sentences should not end with a period/full-stop.
  • I don't think London districts need their own climate sections, and I can't think why this particular area should have one. I would suggest just linking to Climate of London (which might need its own article)?
  • The Stambourne Woods section contains the phrase "Victorian Villas" (both words capitalized). I presume this is not a proper name and the second word should be lowercased.
  • In the Music section, it may be preferable to replace "Spring" with a month, per WP:SEASON.

--Boson (talk) 18:12, 28 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Comments by Hzh

  • I think what's written about the boundaries of Crystal Palace needs to be improved. At the moment it is confusing and ambiguous, for example, I don't know what "the wider area" of Crystal Palace means. To me, Crystal Palace means the immediate areas around the park. The Crystal Palace electoral ward seems to cover a wider area then what is considered the Crystal Palace area (it looks to take in most of Anerley), except for the north and north-west parts of Crystal Palace which are in other boroughs. If you take Anerley and Penge to be distinct from Crystal Palace, then the southern edge of Crystal Palace would simply be just the few streets immediately adjacent to the Crystal Palace Park (Anerley and Penge West stations are very close to the Crystal Palace Park). I'm also not sure why it says Crystal Palace "straddles at least three postcode districts", I can't think of any other postcodes other than the three that would be considered Crystal Palace.
  • Some copy-editing and rephrasing are necessary.
  • I would agree with Boson that the climate section is unnecessary (it's more appropriate for a distinctly separated town or city).
  • Perhaps a section on various amenities such as museum (although I only know of the Crystal Palace Museum) and libraries. There is also the Crystal Palace Park Farm.
  • The Sport clubs section would be better re-titled Sports and then mention the Crystal Palace National Sports Centre.
  • Move the Local government section down. Also I don't know about the advisability of listing names here unless someone is going to regularly update the list.
  • I don't know if Stambourne Woods is considered part of the Crystal Palace or not (seems more like Upper or South Norwood), but I suppose if defining the boundaries of Crystal Palace is vague enough it can be included.

-- Hzh (talk) 15:09, 4 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]