Wikipedia:Peer review/Angwa Sandstone Formation/archive1

Angwa Sandstone Formation

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I've listed this article for peer review because I would like feedback from the community on how to improve it, after having put in much of the scientific literature.

Thanks, Babakathy (talk) 07:20, 12 January 2012 (UTC)

Finetooth comments: Rather than doing a completely separate review of this stub or start-stage article, I'll refer you to the comments I made earlier today on the Batoka Formation. Most of those apply to this article as well. Here are a few additional thoughts:

• Be sure to tell readers in the first paragraph of the lead where in the world this formation is found.

• Instead of double-bolding words in the table headings of the "Flora" section, expand the section to include paragraphs of text about the flora, and add links to the text.

• Limit red links. Mbire District, for example, should only be red-linked once in the entire article, not four times.

• The image is out-of-focus and appears to be a photo of a rock in a glass case. Your image license gives a date of 1996, but the date of generation is given as 12 January 2012. I'm guessing that you took the photo on that more recent date in a geology museum, but I'm not sure what the 1996 date refers to. I'd suggest that you add more detail to the license. Where is the rock you photographed, exactly? What does 1996 mean?

• Please make sure that the existing text includes no copyright violations, plagiarism, or close paraphrasing. For more information on this please see Wikipedia:Wikipedia_Signpost/2009-04-13/Dispatches. (This is a general warning given in view of previous problems that have risen over copyvios.)

I hope these suggestions prove helpful. If so, please consider commenting on any other article at WP:PR. I don't usually watch the PR archives or make follow-up comments. If my suggestions are unclear, please ping me on my talk page. Finetooth (talk) 22:18, 20 January 2012 (UTC)