Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Syed Ahmed/archive1

The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was not promoted by Karanacs 21:01, 7 July 2009 [1].

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Syed Ahmed

Nominator(s): Bangali71 (talk) 16:22, 10 June 2009 (UTC)

• Featured article candidates/Syed Ahmed/archive1

I am nominating this for featured article because it is developed very well, cannot be expanded further more, sections and references are excellent, and meets the guidelines as it is well written with neutrality. Bangali71 (talk) 16:22, 10 June 2009 (UTC)

• Comments

Hi, I am not ready to support this article because:

• the lead is too short I think. It does not adequately summarize the article and gives Reader very little basic information about the man.
• I copyedited his "Personal Life" section. There are many sentences which need prose and punctuation help throughout the other sections.
• I am not sure the flow of ideas is logical, I personally like to see the personal life section come first in a biography but I'll wait to see what others think.
• In the US, the British tabloids have a horrendous reputation for gossip. Isn't The Daily Mail one of these tabloids? I am not sure that it is appropriate to use this type of newspaper for a biography see [2].

NancyHeise ^talk 16:03, 11 June 2009 (UTC)

• Close - thank you for your comments and help Nancy, but I would like to close this FA candidate because there is currently a dispute of information about the money laundry information which needs to be in the article however disputed between other users, that dispute needs to be fixed first. thank you. Bangali71 (talk) 16:13, 12 June 2009 (UTC)

The above discussion is preserved as an archive. Please do not modify it. No further edits should be made to this page.