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The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was promoted by GrahamColm 10:18, 18 January 2013 [1].

John F. Bolt[edit]

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Nominator(s): —Ed!(talk) 20:10, 16 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I am nominating this for featured article. It has passed a GA nomination and a WP:MILHIST A-class review. The previous FAC happened earlier this fall and lapsed with no significant reviewers. —Ed!(talk) 20:10, 16 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]

So far so good on prose, apart from repeating Bolt's name too often, per standard disclaimer, down to where I stopped, John F. Bolt#Formation of VMF-214. I've reviewed the changes made since the last FAC. These are my edits. - Dank (push to talk) 21:05, 16 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Sources and images - spotchecks not done, PD tag present

  • Should be The Washington Post not Washington Post
  • Captions that aren't complete sentences shouldn't end in periods
  • File:John_F._Bolt_1953.jpg: source link returns 404 error, same with File:John_F._Bolt_1943.jpg
    • Fixed one. Removed the other. —Ed!(talk) 02:01, 20 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • File:Navycross.jpg is sourced to Wikipedia. Also, who took the picture? Since it's a medal, you need copyright for the image and the object. Nikkimaria (talk) 20:15, 17 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Comments Support

  • Section "Later life", statement "At the time of his death, Bolt was the last surviving American double ace." Do you have a source for that? See John S. Loisel, Air Force double ace, died January 20, 2010, about six years after Bolt.
  • Workaholic is wikilinked in the lead and in the "Marshall Islands" section, should probably just be linked in one place.
  • No alt text for infobox photo, use the parameter "alt=".
  • No alt text for images of ribbons, only the subsequent award stars on the ribbons.
  • No dab links.
  • No dead external links.
  • If you are not listing any external links, you should remove the empty "External links" section.

*Note 1. Source?

Looks good overall, I'll try and check back later. GregJackP Boomer! 17:23, 20 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]

CommentsSupport by Peacemaker67 (send... over) 04:07, 17 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

  • given the USMC still operate jet fighter aircraft, wouldn't "remains the only USMC jet fighter ace" be a more accurate description (if that is the case of course)? Conceivably a USMC jet fighter pilot could become an ace in the future? I'm a bit surprised no USMC pilot became an ace in Vietnam. Or perhaps you mean the only USMC jet fighter ace of the Korean War?
    • Reworded. And believe it or not, Bolt is actually the most recent USMC ace. Vietnam only had five US aces, two Navy and three Air Force. —Ed!(talk) 13:05, 17 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • is CTI a proper name? If not, the initial caps are not appropriate.
  • "training other aviation cadets" he was not a cadet, so "other" doesn't appear appropriate.
  • Where was VMF-214 based before they went to the Russells?
  • "Although new to the war in the Pacific, Bolt had over 700 hours" is a bit of a surprise, as there has been no mention of him flying the F4U prior to this point. Did he do all those hours while the squadron was doing work-up or did he fly it state-side too?
  • suggest "Wiggins" be "Dorothy Wiggins" given she was only mentioned briefly earlier.
  • "On 11 July Bolt led another flight of four fighters in a reconnaissance mission above Sinuiju, his 37th combat mission in Korea" not sure how this works given he flew 92 close support combat missions earlier?

Support; as all recommended corrections have been made. Boneyard90 (talk) 15:10, 17 January 2013 (UTC) Comments by Boneyard90 (talk) 07:57, 17 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

  • In the "Early Years", Why is there no mention of his mother?
  • As above, the mention of his 700 hours' experience on the F4U is a bit of a surprise, and needs some explanation.
  • In the Marshall Islands, the connection between "Quartermaster Kids" and the souvenirs is not obvious.
  • "Vela Lavella" section: Third paragraph needs a citation.
  • "Later life": "enrolled in the law school at the University of Florida Fredric G. Levin College of Law," - is redundant. Suggest: "enrolled in the Fredric G. Levin College of Law at the University of Florida"


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