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2019 WPA World Ten-ball Championship[edit]

Nominator(s): Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:44, 15 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]

This article is about a professional ten-ball pool tournament held two years ago. The championship hadn't been held since 2015, when it was won by Ko Pin-yi. Ko lost in the semi-finals of the event to Joshua Filler, who played Ko's brother Ko Ping-chung in the final. Filler, the reigning nine-ball world champion went into an early lead, but was ultimately defeated 10-7 by Ko. The event featured a $132,000 prize fund, very large for a pool event, and played as both a double-elimination and single-elimination tournament.

This is the second nomination, after the first drew little commentary. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:44, 15 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Image review

  • File:WPA_world_Ten-ball_Championship_poster_2019.jpg: FUR is incomplete. Nikkimaria (talk) 15:23, 15 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • I have expanded this somewhat. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 09:46, 16 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Accessibility review

Support from Gog the Mild[edit]

Recusing to review.

  • "with the previous championship held in 2015." It either needs a comma before "with" or (better IMO) a semi colon and changing to 'the previous championship was held in 2015.'
  • "but was later moved to". "later" is unnecessary.
  • In the lead, four sentences start with "The event". Is some variety possible?
    • Yeah, I've changed. There's still two "the event", but are in different paras now. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:19, 20 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "The event featured 64 participants based on world pool rankings, as well as qualifiers and played as a double-elimination tournament until the 16 players remained, becoming a single-elimination tournament." 1. 'was played'. 2. Suggest splitting.
  • "in both 2016 and 2018 both fell through". Delete one "both".
  • "partnered with CueSports International". Who are?
    • Explained. They are pretty much a group that owns lots of tours, but "event organisers" covers it. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 14:32, 20 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "will be played in Las Vegas until 2022 as part of a three-year deal for the event to be played in the United States". Given 'will be played in Las Vegas until 2022', 'to be played in the United States' is unnecessary.
  • "The event featured 64 players, with entries being selected from ranking lists for players tours, such as the Euro Tour and the WPA, with 16 qualifiers, held in events from June and July 2019." This doesn't seem to explain how the 64 participants were selected.
    • I've added a section as to how this did work. Don't ask me who qualified by each tour, as this wasn't really publicised outside of a few players. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 14:32, 20 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "as a double-elimination bracket". You what? Like this?
    • A bracket is an American word for the knockout structure - you might call it a tree, or similar. I'm not sure how you'd change this. Any ideas of a better wordage? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 14:32, 20 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"double-elimination" or "double elimination"?
To answer your question, maybe 'The tournament was played as a double-elimination knockout structure or bracket ...'?
I've just put knockout. Our own article uses double-elimination, so so did I. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:44, 22 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "becoming a single-elimination tournament." → 'when it became a single-elimination tournament.'
  • "were played as a race-to-eight racks"?
    • Changed to "first to". A race is the correct way to say this however. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 14:36, 20 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "the alternating break format." At which, I suspect, a reader goes down for the third time.
  • "After a combined eight break-and-runs" I know that there is a link, but the idea of an encyclopedia is that an article explains its subject without the need for constant referring to other articles, an understanding of which may require a referral to yet more articles ...
    • So, a break-and-run means the player who breaks wins the rack without letting the other player take a shot. I can reword to say that the eight racks were won by the breaking player, but a break-and-run is a specific thing, I'm not sure how you explain what it is succinctly. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 14:44, 20 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Yep, that does it. If you want to add ', known as a break-and-run' then you can use that term thereafter if you want.
We do only use it once more, but I have done so. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:44, 22 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Early rounds" section title. Surely the "early rounds" were the "Double elimination bracket" rounds?
    • I'm getting that this is the knockout rounds. Ive reordered to avoid the confusion Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 15:22, 20 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "struggled to play against Ko's safety play", "play ... play". Maybe 'struggled against Ko's safety play'?
  • "after snookering himself behind the 10-ball." And for the non-initiated this would be?
    • So, a snooker (named as something that is used in the game of the same name) is when you can't directly hit the ball you are supposed to. Think of it like a solar eclipse. In this case, the cue ball, (the one you hit) is beyond the 10-ball, but you are trying to hit another ball. Basically it's not what you want to do. I'm not sure what other wording can be used to explain this. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 15:30, 20 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Apologies. I have a bad habit of asking rhetorical questions and/or acting the simpleton when reviewing. I knew what you meant. I was concerned that many readers wouldn't. Hmm. 'after inadvertantly leaving the ball he needed to play obscured behind the 10-ball' or similar?
Reworded. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:44, 22 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "The semi-finals and final were held on June 26, the last day of the competition.! Optional: do we need to be told that the final was held on the last day of the competition?
    • I was getting at this was the last day of the whole event. If you remember in the format section, there was other events (such as the national BCA championship that was also going on). I've removed this though as it isn't relevant. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 15:35, 20 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "after losing the lag". ?
    • Removed - not important. The lag is just what pool uses rather than a coin toss to see who plays first. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 15:38, 20 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "produced two dry breaks." Dry break?
  • "capitalizing on a scratch from Ko". Referring to Wiktionary, and looking only at definitions specifying that they apply to sport "scratch" can mean seven different things. Even restricting that to cue sports it can mean two different - and opposing - things.
    • I've linked, and changed the words. Wiktionary does actually do a good job of explaining what this means. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 15:44, 20 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "and later tied up the match". Is "up" correct in this context?
  • "Ko played a kick shot" Could "kick shot" be explained in line?
Unaddressed.
  • "Ko banked the 1-ball". "banked"?
    • Both of these are two sides to the same coin. They both involve hitting a cushion to make the shot. The original is where you hit the cue ball into the cushion to hit the object ball, the other is where you hit the object ball into the cushion which then goes into the pocket. I'm not sure how you can. Explain these succinctly. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 16:14, 20 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "ran the rack". ?
  • "Ko met up with his brother Pin-yi during the break". This seems a bit of a random comment.
  • "The win was the first major championship of Ko Ping-chung's career". Do you mean that it was his first such victory? Or the first such championship that he had taken part in?
  • "which was won by Ko's brother while he had lost in the semi-final". It may be helpful to replace "he" with a name.
  • Were there any comments from Filler after the final?

Gog the Mild (talk) 15:26, 19 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Cheers Lee Vilenski, that all looks good. See what you think of my responses above, and then I'll think about having a final read through. Gog the Mild (talk) 13:44, 21 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Gog the Mild Looks like it is just the two terms regarding "banking" and "kick shot" which I'm struggling to rewrite. The only way to really explain in prose what a bank (or double) is would really need the citation to state which rail was being used. I could write "Ko played the 1-ball against the cushion, and into the side pocket", but something like a double is very common language for pool. I feel we would be dumbing down the article and not improving it to add this additional words, unless you have a better wording. I have reworded the kick shot variant, let me know what you think. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:44, 22 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Second read through[edit]

Most of the below are by way of suggestions. See what you think.

  • "the previous championship held in 2015." 'the previous championship was held in 2015'?
  • "with the Billiard Congress of America national ten-ball event". Should that be 'with the Billiard Congress of America's national ten-ball event'?
  • "players competing were based on both the world pool rankings". "based" → 'selected' or similar.
    • Only issue is that wildcards are based on rankings, but not selected on them. That is kind of the actual difference between something being ranking-only, and ranking and wildcard. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 12:43, 22 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "becoming changing to a single-elimination format" → 'then changing to a single-elimination format'.
  • "won the previous 2015 championship". Either "previous" or "2015" needs to go.
  • "where it became a single-elimination tournament". "where" → 'when'.
  • "Double-elimination matches were played as the first to eight racks, whilst the single-elimination matches were played as the first to ten racks." Optionally add something like '(A rack being a single game, named after the balls being "racked" at the start of each game.)
    • This isn't an article on how things are named, so I don't see how linking to rack is helpful. We have to be very careful how we word terms like "game", "match" etc, as they have different meanings, which is why the article specifically uses the technical term. The term "game" could be used for either the whole match, or just one frame. I don't think a reader is going to look at this term and be confused over what it means with the context given. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 12:43, 22 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "(or "break and run")". Suggest → '(known as a "break and run")'.
  • "Ko Ping-chung reach the final after a 10–3 win". "reach" → 'reached'.

A nice job there. Flow versus fullness of explanation is frequently a tricky balance. Where I am not completely happy I think that the context gives a reader enough to go on. Supporting.

Gog the Mild (talk) 11:46, 22 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks Gog the Mild. It certainly is a balancing act finding terms that are suitable to be reworded, and ones that would actually make the article worse by replacing. Thanks for the in-depth review; I hope we get a little more eyes on this one. (I'll get some FAC reviews done as soon as I can). Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:11, 24 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Oh yeah. I am currently working on an article I hope to bring to FAC where I need to explain late-Medieval siege equipment and techniques *eyeroll* .
I'll put it up for a source review.
That would be good. We have been missing your reviews. When you get the time, wrapping up the 1987 FA Cup Final review would be good. Gog the Mild (talk) 10:44, 24 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Sure thing. I'd assume a trebuchet can just be described as "like a cannon, but not" :P. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 12:08, 24 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Source review[edit]

Spotchecks not done

  • I'm very confused about when this was actually taking place. The lead says June 22 to 26, 2019. The infobox says July 22 to 26. Double elimination bracket says the event began July 22, Knockout rounds says the quarter-finals were on June 25. Am I missing something?
    • Nope, I'm just inept. It was July, I think I got confused somewhere. Updated Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 11:38, 25 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Lead says the event was originally to be held in General Santos, text says Manila - which is correct?
    • I've made some changes. Whilst an event was suggested for Manila, it never came through. More important was that two prior events that had dates and stuff for 2016 and 2018 were cancelled in Manila. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 11:38, 25 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Seeing inconsistencies around publishers/works - for example FN5 has a work title of "CueSports International (CSI)", but then FN10 has a publisher of "Cue Sports International". Please check throughout.
    • Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 11:12, 25 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]
      • Still inconsistencies here - why is the same thing a work title in one case and a publisher in the other? Nikkimaria (talk) 15:11, 28 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • FN16 is incomplete
  • What makes sixpockets.de a high-quality reliable source? Alison Chang? Pro9?
    • I have culled these. Alisong Chang I was always a bit weary of, but it is generally deemed quite the expert, but it is essentially a personal blog. I have also removed sixpockets, which whilst it has it's own team, aparently it also posts guest columns without ever (to my knowledge) stating if it is editorialised at all! Pro9 I'm sure is reliable, but I can't find much on it, so I've replaced anyway. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 11:12, 25 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • FN30 is missing author. Nikkimaria (talk) 15:10, 24 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • I think I've understood and covered this now. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:06, 1 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Support Comments from Sportsfan77777[edit]

I'll give a detailed review at some point. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 05:10, 4 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

In the meantime, one major comment I have is... In the participant summary section, can you write out who were the key participants like you usually do in your other FAs? (e.g. Who were the former champions/finalists, contenders, and top-ranked players from each tour? Any unique lower-ranked players worth noting? Also, can you summarize what the seven tours are? I assume the WPA is the main one. Are the other six also professional? Related to how the tours work, if you are for instance a top Asian player, does that mean you only play on the WPA or are you a member of both the WPA and the APBU?) Sportsfan77777 (talk) 05:10, 4 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

I would do more, if I knew more. I don't usually do this - I think I did this on maybe two other events? It's a bit WP:OR/WP:SYNTHy to an extent, because the sources don't say it, they just say that they were participating, and the other ref shows they won/final in the event before. There had only been four prior events, and the only former finalist was the defending champion who I went into depth talking about. I see the need for something to describe the tours, but most of them are the local tours (European, Asian, American etc.) with the WPA being a ranking for other world stage tournaments (like the World nine-ball championship). There seems to be little information as to which players actually qualified from which tour, or how they came up with that number. The official event info list doesn't have anything [2]. I do have a list of the players who qualified from the local competitions, but that's about it. I have signed up for Inside Mag Pool & Billiard magazine, I'm just awaiting my archives access and see if it is mentioned there, but that would be the last hope really. None of the individual governing bodies mention this at all. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 12:16, 4 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Okay, that's fine about not including the stuff you don't have. In part with regard to qualification, I feel like the ranking system(s) itself could use a little more of an explanation (see my comments below). Sportsfan77777 (talk) 05:25, 14 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

More detailed comments... Sportsfan77777 (talk) 05:25, 14 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

No problem. Been a little busy recently, will update on this in a day or so. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 11:17, 16 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

  • I don't understand what CueSports International is or what it links to.
    • Clarified a little. CSI are the parent company to the BCA and other events. We don't do a good job in the redirected article, sadly. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 12:37, 16 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • After plans an event in both 2016 and 2018 ===>>> After plans for an event in both 2016 and 2018
  • a 2019 event organised to be held at the Rio All-Suite Hotel & Casino in Las Vegas, Nevada, as part of a three-year deal for the event to be played in the United States was agreed. <<<=== This seems like too much passive voice. (agreed by who?, and "organised to be held" seems like it could be shortened)
  • July 22 to 26, 2019. <<<=== You don't need to repeat "2019".
  • Featuring 64 participants, <<<=== 64 or 62? (see comment below)
  • players competing were based on both the world pool rankings as well as qualifying events. <<<=== Are they also based on continental tour rankings?
  • then changing to a ===>>> at which point it changed to a
  • Chinese Taipei player Ko Ping-chung <<<=== should be Taiwanese or "representing Chinese Taipei" to be the most correct
  • who won the previous championship <<<=== I'd suggest "who was the defending champion" instead

Format

  • Probably worth adding that all previous editions were in the Philippines
  • Also worth adding that the first edition was in 2008
  • Was it ever intended to be held annually?
    • I haven't got anything that says that, but it's been many years since it was an annual event. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 12:56, 16 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • stage the event along with the World Pool-Billiard Association (WPA) <<<=== Aren't the WPA also who Predator Group partnered with (like CueSports International)?
  • Is there a reason the tournament is not held regularly? (Is ten-ball less played than nine-ball or other variants in general?)
    • Pool has been in decline for years. Nine-ball is the big event, and even that has come under issues of not being run. If you aren't the Mosconi Cup, or World Cup of Pool, there might be issues with money. This event in particular has issues with money with players not getting paid for the 2015 event. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 12:56, 16 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • with plans to host the event for three years <<<=== Which event? This one or the Players Championship?
  • "The WPA World Ten-ball Championship will be played" <<<=== This could be rephrased so you are not WP:CRYSTAL-balling
  • Relatedly, if you are referring to this event with the "for three years" comment above, then that is repetitive with the "will be played" sentence.
  • such as the Euro Tour and the WPA <<<=== Is the WPA a tour?
    • They give out ranking points for the major events. I've changed to an actual tour. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 12:56, 16 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • with 16 qualifiers, held in events from June and July 2019 <<<=== I don't think this wording ("16 qualifiers, held in events") makes sense. (unless the qualifiers are part of broader events and not isolated events on their own?)
  • The tournament was played as a double-elimination knockout structure until 16 players remained, when it became a single-elimination tournament. <<<=== Looking at the link to the draws, it looks like they refer to these as stages (i.e. a double-elimination stage and a single-elimination stage). The tournament cannot "become a tournament".
    • Yeah, as above, I originally had "bracket", but not sure of a better word here. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 12:56, 16 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Also in that sentence, it would be "double-elimination format" or "double-elimination knockout format", albeit the Wikipedia article on knockout format says that would imply single-elimination (not sure if that's correct).
  • Clarify that the double-elimination format implies players need to win three matches to advance to the single-elimination stage. (Is that correct?)
    • Nope, double-elimination brackets are confusing. You have to win three or four matches. It's a weird American thing, and the reason I didn't go into details as to how these work. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 12:56, 16 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • The event was also played ===>>> Matches were played
  • with each player taking turns to break in each rack ===>>> in which the players take turns to break each rack ("in each rack" seems to suggest both players break in one rack. Also, I don't know, but is "to break" correct versus "at breaking" or "at the break"?)
    • Reworded. Yeah, it doesn't seem like great English, but it is indeed a player "to break". A break is like a serve in tennis Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 12:56, 16 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • It was broadcast ===>>> The event was broadcast

Participant summary

  • The player list has 64 spots, but only 62 of them are actually filled?
  • local qualifying events ===>>> regional qualifying events ("local" sounds like "near the tournament". I think they were global, right?)
    • No, they were played in Las Vegas, which is what they meant by local. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 13:05, 18 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "in the following tours" implies a list of tours. I think a format like "World Pool Association (16)" where it's just the tour (and then the number of qualifiers in parentheses) would fit that better.
  • Relatedly, these seem like organisations, not tours?
  • With regards to my comments last week, no worries about including information you don't have.
  • The current explanation seems to imply that each tour has its own ranking. Is that correct? Or do the spots go to the top-ranked players from each tour according to the overall WPA rankings?
    • So as far as I can tell (nothing seems to go into actually in-depth about it), the WPA has a very loose ranking, based on how people do in the world championships and select other events. I think the allocation for the WPA takes priority, but the sources don't say anything about this. I did reach out to both the WPA and CSI on this, but neither got back to me. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 13:12, 18 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Is it worth mentioning who are the top-ranked players? Or are these players not necessarily the favourites? (I could imagine that being the case if being good at 9-ball doesn't mean you are good at 10-ball?)
    • Yeah, the rankings are generally for other games (such as 9-ball and 8-ball), so it's difficult to say who is the theoretical favourite, other than who was the number one ranked player by the WPA, but unless I've mentioned it in the prose, the sources themselves don't credit this. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 13:05, 18 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Relatedly, the tournament wasn't seeded or anything?
  • If you don't have who qualified by tour, maybe state which countries had the most representatives?
    • Quite a bit of WP:OR around that, but even if there was a list, I'm not sure it's anything more than a bit of trivia. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 13:05, 18 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Prize fund

  • Okay.

Double elimination

  • I'd suggest calling this sub-section "Double elimination stage" rather than bracket
  • Filler lost his second match 1–8 to Johann Chua after losing the first seven racks of the match. <<<=== no need to repeat "of the match" at the end
  • his opening round match to Ariel Casto ===>>> his opening round match against Ariel Casto
    • Done 13:05, 18 March 2021 (UTC)
  • Defending champion Ko Pin-yi won his opening round match to Ariel Casto [de], but lost to Alex Pagulayan 8–6 in the second round. <<<=== This is incomplete. He still qualified. The "but" seems to suggest he didn't.
  • American players Shane Van Boening and Billy Thorpe <<<=== specify that these are good players? or at least popular players? At the moment, it doesn't seem clear why they are highlighted instead of others.
    • I've clarified, they were on the same Mosconi Cup team. Some were mentioned more than others as thats where the news are. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 13:05, 18 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • shared a hotel room for the event, but were drawn <<<=== I don't think the "but" is necessary. It's not really a negative.
  • Maybe add how Masato Yoshioka did, since he made the semifinals?
  • Sure. There's not all that much info on him (like at all), but I've added something. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 13:05, 18 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Albin Ouschan to reach the knockout round ===>>> Albin Ouschan to reach the knockout rounds

Single elimination

  • Should probably stick to using full names for the Ko brothers to avoid confusion.
    • I've done this in a few cases. I don't want to be super redundant though, let me know what you think. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 13:40, 18 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Styer failed to take advantage in rack 12, <<<=== take advantage of what?
  • Filler failed to capitalize in racks 16 and 17 <<<=== failed to capitalize on what?
  • Ko Ping-chung reached the final after a 10–3 win ===>>> Ko Ping-chung reached the final with a 10–3 win
  • regional qualifier Masato Yoshioka <<<=== "regional qualifier" should be mentioned the first time Yoshioka is mentioned, not here
  • pocketing the cue ball <<<=== add "(known as a scratch)" OR I think you could just say "scratching the cue ball"?
    • As per Gog's comment, I didn't want to use jargon terms for the sake of it. As I don't talk about a scratch again, it's a bit moot. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 13:40, 18 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • to trail 5–3, ===>>> to cut the deficit to 5–3,
  • The final was played as a race-to-ten-racks match <<<=== It doesn't make sense to specify that when all matches in this stage were race-to-ten.
  • with Ko taking a comfort break after rack four ===>>> at which point Ko took a comfort break
  • , before taking the lead ===>>> and took the lead
  • With Filler firing a dry break <<<=== I would assume "firing" isn't formal enough.
  • to win the rack to lead 9–7 ===>>> to win the rack and lead 9–7
  • The win was the first major championship win of Ko Ping-chung's career, having previously reached semi-finals in various events. ===>>> The win was the first major championship win of Ko Ping-chung's career, with his best previous major results having been semi-finals in various events.
  • In the caption: Niels Feijen reached the quarter-final of the event, before losing to 2018 WPA World Nine-ball Championship winner Joshua Filler. ===>>> Niels Feijen reached the quarter-final of the event, losing to 2018 WPA World Nine-ball Championship winner Joshua Filler.

Draw

  • The following results only show the final 16 players. ===>>> The following results only show the single-elimination stage comprising the final 16 players.
  • All matches were ===>>> All matches in this stage were
  • Players in bold represent winners: ===>>> Players in bold represent winners.

Overall

  • I noticed in general that you don't usually include the ranking points distribution, or any description of the ranking system. Is there a reason why you leave it out? I didn't even realize this was a ranking event until I found it in the WPA rankings here.
  • It doesn't makes sense to link the balls that aren't the 10-ball. Those links go to the disciplines, not the balls.
    • That's more of an issue with our glossary than the links. Eight-ball (the game), and 8-ball (the ball), are different. I have been meaning to tighten up the glossary, but I'm not quite there yet. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 13:50, 18 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • I think the more important comments above have to do with the sections outside of the tournament summary. The comments on the tournament summary are more minor.
    • Yeah, it's a bit sad that there is no more information. Even looking at [3], there's no info on where the points actually come from, nor what the next event is going to be a ranking event. It's a bit different from snooker, where the rankings are professional or bust, and are clearly defined. I don't mind adding any notes, or something to say it's a WPA ranking event in there somewhere. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 13:50, 18 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

After these comments are addressed, I'll look through it again. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 05:25, 14 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Replies / New comments

  • For the first sentence: "a professional pool tournament for the discipline of ten-ball, organised by pool governing bodies, the World Pool-Billiard Association (WPA) and CueSports International." ===>>> "professional pool tournament for the discipline of ten-ball organised by the World Pool-Billiard Association (WPA) and CueSports International, both pool governing bodies." (you don't the first comma; the second one doesn't seem right)
    • I've worded a bit differently, I don't like the quantifier at the end. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 11:19, 22 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • The event was the first official world ten-ball championship ===>>> The 2019 event was the first official world ten-ball championship
  • with plans to host the ten-ball event for three years ===>>> and had plans to host the ten-ball event for three years
  • with 16 qualifiers, from winning events ===>>> and 16 qualifiers who had won events
  • as a double-elimination knockout structure ===>> with a double-elimination knockout structure
  • became a single-elimination format ===>>> became single-elimination format
    • I'm not sure this is an improvement. The sentence doesn't read right with "became single-elimination format". Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 11:19, 22 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • With regards to the rankings, you might as well specify it's a WPA ranking event somewhere, even if it's just in the format section. It would make the event seem more important.

Looks good. I agree that I wish more information on some of the technical details were available. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 08:52, 20 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Supporting! Sportsfan77777 (talk) 06:30, 23 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Support Comments from MaranoFan[edit]

  • bulle-benson.de redirects to Wikipedia so I'm not sure if linking to it as the source on File:MC2008 M10 015 - Shane van Boening.JPG is beneficial.
    • I have no idea how this works on commons. I'll ask there a bit more about it. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:32, 25 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Please do.--NØ 10:51, 25 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • It seems CueSports International is abbreviated as CSI. Might be worth adding in a bracket, for consistency.
    • I don't use this in the prose, so there is no need to explain this. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:28, 25 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "a 2019 event held at the Rio All-Suite Hotel & Casino in Las Vegas, Nevada" -- This part would still make sense if "held" was omitted, just to decrease repetition
  • "In addition, five players were chosen as wildcard entries by the event organisers. An additional 16 players were entered from local qualifying events held in the weeks leading up to the event" -- Active voice
  • "The tournament total prize fund was $132,000" --> "The tournament's total prize fund was $132,000"
  • "Feijen's final break pocketed four balls, leading Strickland to comment on the performance by saying "wow" -- Could be reduced to just "Feijen's final break pocketed four balls, leading Strickland to comment "wow"
  • I am not sure why Ko Pin-yi's full name is being repeated instead of just "Pin-yi", same with Ko Ping-chung. Apologies if it is some obvious reason.
    • So are these Chinese names, and my understanding is you'd use the first name as a surname (like Ding Junhui is Ding, Junhui). I'm no expect on these though. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:32, 25 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • There seem to be too many quotations from this source according to the copyvio detector. If possible, try to paraphrase some more.
    • Most of this is direct attributed quotes. The copyvio detector isn't the best comparison for this. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:32, 25 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • I haven't seen this particular citation style with bare urls before but I will assume good faith since neither of the other two reviewers raised concerns about it.
    • Which ones are you referring too? I can fix any citations that aren't right. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:32, 25 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • I meant the website names being expressed as "abc.com" instead of "Abc". But that doesn't seem to be a problem.--NØ 10:51, 25 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Those are the few comments from me. A great article overall :) --NØ 11:17, 24 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks for taking a look at this MaranoFan, I've looked at the above and given some comments. I'll see what I can do about the commons image. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:39, 25 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]
I am now going to support.--NØ 10:51, 25 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]
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