User talk:Nutrition32
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Hi Nutrition32,
I was reviewing your self assigned article, at first the article looked like it already had quite a lot of information but upon further inspection I can see how there might be room for improvement. I would love to hear your ideas on how to expand the sections of the articles, or to improve them. I did a quick scan of library literature and I think you will have no problems finding both books and journal articles to help support your research into the topic. I am interested to see how this will turn out! Saguaromelee (talk) 20:25, 17 September 2015 (UTC)
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Welcome to The Wikipedia Adventure![edit]
- Hi Nutrition32! We're so happy you wanted to play to learn, as a friendly and fun way to get into our community and mission. I think these links might be helpful to you as you get started.
-- 14:06, Friday, September 18, 2015 (UTC)
| Mission 1 | Mission 2 | Mission 3 | Mission 4 | Mission 5 | Mission 6 | Mission 7 |
| Say Hello to the World | An Invitation to Earth | Small Changes, Big Impact | The Neutral Point of View | The Veil of Verifiability | The Civility Code | Looking Good Together |
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This article is very well done in terms of understanding and organization. Without any background knowledge in Parkinson's disease, I was able to understand what the treatment was about and how it applies to the disease. However, there are some grammatical fixes that could occur to clarify some ambiguous sentences. I would also remove this: "Please be cautious in trying to hope for the same effects as the patients cited in this article" as it implies a familiarity with the readers that should be changed into something that sounds less like a suggestion or persuasion to do something. MassBlade (talk) 15:57, 16 October 2015 (UTC)