User talk:Immcarle6
Hi Kell! I don't know if I'm doing this right, but I hope this gets you to haha!
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Hi ImmCarle6. Wikipedia editing is fun!
Peer Review for "Antigen-presenting Cells"[edit]
Hi! I read the article and really liked it. The head section is a helpful in terms of introducing some background immunology knowledge to better understand the main section, and at the same time points out why APCs are important to us. This is very minor but it might be helpful to explain what antigens are and the relationship between pathogen, antigen, epitopes and the immune system before going on into the body section. The article is well organized so that information slowly builds up from the basics into higher level ideas, and well written so that it is mostly understandable to the general public. The information included in the article are well-supported, coming from reliable and recent sources. Most of them are accurate, despite a few ambiguous sentences that can be easily fixed by rephrasing them. As you said in class, one of the paragraphs lacks citations. It will be nice if you can add some citations to it. It might also be useful and interesting to mention that MHC only presents protein peptides and not carbohydrates or lipids etc. In all, there are a lot of great information, both from class and from good sources. The article covers just enough information to introduce APC without going into too much details. It is also nice to see how there are many hyperlinks to more detailed articles. The clear explanations of antigen-presenting mechanisms as well as interesting facts about cancer treatment makes this article a very enjoyable read! I hope to read more about Nice
Here are some suggestions in the context of your article: 1. In the first paragraph of the “Types” section, it might be a bit confusing to the general public what is the difference between MHC class I and II since they are explained towards the end of the paragraph. It will be clearer if you can move the explanation closer to the beginning of the paragraph.
2. Moving “T cells must be activated by interacting with an APC, usually a dendritic cell, before they can divide and perform their function” to the beginning of the paragraph will make the context clearer.
3. In the first paragraph of the section “Professional”, it might be helpful to point out that it is the dendritic cells and other phagocytes that bring in antigens through phagocytosis, and B cells through receptor-mediated endocytosis.
4. In the first paragraph of section “Dendritic cells”, it will be less confusing if you can briefly mention what CD4 and CD8 are, or even just use T helper / cytotoxic cells directly to make it more straightforward.
5. Also in the same paragraph, you can mention the importance of cross-presentation in activating T cytotoxic cells and targeting infected cells.
6. In the second paragraph of “Dendritic cells”, it is helpful to clarify the relationship between the cascade of events. For this sentence “Once a dendritic cell's toll-like receptors recognize a pathogen-associated molecular pattern, antigen is phagocytosed, and the dendritic cell becomes activated, upregulating the expression of MHC class II molecules as well as the co-stimulatory molecule CD40.”, clarify that dendritic cells are always phagocytosing regardless of danger signals. TLRs recognizing PAMPs causes upregulation of B7 and MHC class II with peptide. Immcarle8 (talk) 23:06, 25 February 2016 (UTC)