User talk:Haneefav1/sandbox
- I liked the definition of what the actual disease is.
- Need to add all the required things (signs/symptoms, causes, mechanism, etc.)
- When doing so, be sure to link key relevant words that people might not know what about
- Try to have as many references as possible and be sure to cite in every paragraph.
--Asomo101 (talk) 02:56, 17 November 2020 (UTC) asomo101
- I like how you have the disease clearly defined in your abstract and how you linked scientific words to individual links for more detail
- Need to add more such as signs and symptoms, pathophysiology, diagnosis, etc.
- Make sure to link scientific words and make sure the general public is able to understand your page even if they do not have a scientific background
- Make sure to cite your sources within the page and not just in your references section
Rschubert112 (talk) 16:18, 18 November 2020 (UTC)
- I enjoyed how well organized it is. In addition how the x-ray is there to demonstrate the lung abnormality. Also, the information is cited very well.
- In the first section, I would highlight and link obliterative fibrosis together so it can correlate. You might find exact content, then I would keep it as is and just explain briefly what that means.
- In the mechanism I would here explain what is happening in the lung to cause this issue in the lung and how it impairs breathing etc.
- In the treatment section, neonates cant have 100% supplemental O2, as its a contraindication. I would state <100% supplemental O2.
Yusur.alj (talk) 20:47, 19 November 2020 (UTC)
- A little more explanation in the lead would help give people context.
- The bulleted list in signs and symptoms is helpful, but feels like a jump from what came before. A little lead in would help there.
- There is not one cause, but there are some known causes. Please list them! Also, you don't need to list signs there. They were in the previous section.
- I can find information about the mechanism. There's not a lot, but there is some out there. This page has some: https://rarediseases.info.nih.gov/diseases/10780/diffuse-idiopathic-pulmonary-neuroendocrine-cell-hyperplasia#:~:text=Listen,(neurons)%20and%20produce%20hormones%20 as does this one: http://www.pathologyoutlines.com/topic/lungtumordipnech.html
- I can find multiple articles on this in the past five years. You should include them in your research section.
- Could use more links to other wiki pages.