Template talk:Did you know nominations/H. E. and A. Bown

Hook modifications[edit]

... that Arthur Bown designed the Jubilee Memorial, Harrogate (pictured) to commemorate Queen Victoria's golden jubilee? [2022-11-04 at 15:34:41, by Amakuru]
... that Arthur Bown designed the Jubilee Memorial (pictured) in Harrogate to commemorate Queen Victoria's golden jubilee? [2022-11-04 at 15:44:39, by Amakuru]

GalliumBot (talk • contribs) (he/it) 18:25, 4 November 2022 (UTC)[reply]

I can see why you did that (because "pictured" is next to Harrogate, not the monument itself), but the new hook is not an improvement, because the hook now looks as if Bown did the designing in Harrogate, and readers won't know where the monument is. Regarding the original hook, the readers won't really think that the picture is of Harrogate in general, and not of the monument, because all you can see is the monument - so you didn't need to change it for a more awkward hook. I don't think it needed to be changed. Storye book (talk) 21:33, 4 November 2022 (UTC)[reply]