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The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.

The result was: promoted by Yoninah (talk) 22:13, 18 June 2020 (UTC)

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Jacob Frankel

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  • ... that Jacob Frankel served as the first official Jewish chaplain in the United States Army?

Created by Sir Joseph (talk) and MatthewVanitas (talk). Nominated by Sir Joseph (talk) at 02:33, 31 May 2020 (UTC).

  • Just a comment as I scroll by; Sir Joseph, could you supply the source for the hook as requested in the DYK template? ♠PMC♠ (talk) 12:25, 1 June 2020 (UTC)
  • Premeditated Chaos, it was in the ref at the end of the paragraph, but I added a new ref to the end of the sentence as well. Thanks, let me know if you need anything else.Sir Joseph (talk) 14:55, 1 June 2020 (UTC)
  • Sorry, I meant could you add it here on this page - it's supposed to be in the DYK template. ♠PMC♠ (talk) 23:44, 1 June 2020 (UTC)
The Haaretz reference in the article also works well. This is a well written article, new enough, long enough, well sourced, neutral. No need for QPQ as only three between the two authors. Two small issues: (1) One sentence in the article (marked "when") needs a source; (2) the hook would be more interesting if turned around – @Sir Joseph and MatthewVanitas: what do you think of ALT1:

Onceinawhile (talk) 21:32, 8 June 2020 (UTC)

  • Onceinawhile, thanks for the ping, I added a ref for the moving to the US. I'm not sure of the ALT though, but I am OK either way, but I do think it should be "during the Civil War" not "in the Civil War" It's really a matter of perspective in that the first hook is that Frankel was the first official chaplain in army, and the second hook as that the Army had a first official chaplain during the civil war and it was Frankel. Also, I think the first hook makes you ask if he was the first official chaplain, what does that mean exactly? Was there an unofficial?
@Sir Joseph: thanks for the fix on the article. Taking your comments into account, I propose ALT2 below. Well done on creating this interesting article. Onceinawhile (talk) 23:13, 9 June 2020 (UTC)
  • @Onceinawhile:, Thanks, much appreciated. Just a minor nitpick to make it more interesting is that this hook takes out the drama of "official" and there being a whole kerfuffle to get Frankel as the first non-Christian chaplain to serve. That brings me to an even more interesting hook perhaps, "The first non-Christian chaplain to serve in the Army, Jacob Frankel..rabbi or something..... History of Non-Christian Chaplains. Sir Joseph (talk) 23:45, 9 June 2020 (UTC)
@Sir Joseph: makes sense - how about the below? I have played around with the "official" word - I think it is implied in the word "employed":
Onceinawhile (talk) 07:23, 10 June 2020 (UTC)
Onceinawhile, yeah, I think that's a good one, and it does sound like an interesting hook.Sir Joseph (talk) 13:20, 10 June 2020 (UTC)
Great, good to go. Onceinawhile (talk) 13:35, 10 June 2020 (UTC)
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