Template:Did you know nominations/HMS Sickle

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The result was: promoted by Yoninah (talk) 20:18, 19 February 2019 (UTC)

HMS Sickle[edit]

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Sickle on the surface

... that after HMS Sickle's (pictured) deck gun jammed while attacking a ship and sailors from Sickle went aboard to sink it manually, they brought 1000 oranges and lemons from the ship back to their submarine? Source: the article
- ALT1:... that after HMS Sickle's (pictured) deck gun jammed while attacking a ship, sailors from Sickle went aboard to sink it manually, but they first brought 1000 oranges and lemons from the ship back to their submarine? Source: the article

Reviewed: Flossenbürg concentration camp

5x expanded by L293D (talk). Self-nominated at 13:25, 25 January 2019 (UTC).

Review 5X expansion, timely nominated. No apparent copyright violation or close paraphrasing. Earwig is clear. Both hooks are, in my opinion, wordy and need to be edited down. They are neutral and supported by in line reliable sources. QPQ confirmed. Picture is free, clear at 100 pix. 7&6=thirteen (☎) 13:46, 25 January 2019 (UTC)

@7&6=thirteen: how about this:
ALT2:... that after sailors from HMS Sickle (pictured) boarded a small ship to sink it, they brought 1000 oranges and lemons from the ship's cargo back to their submarine? Source: the article L293D (☎ • ✎) 13:52, 25 January 2019 (UTC)

Much better hook. GTG. 7&6=thirteen (☎) 14:00, 25 January 2019 (UTC)