Template:Did you know nominations/Ernest Bohr
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The result was: promoted by Carabinieri (talk) 15:19, 1 March 2013 (UTC).
Ernest Bohr[edit]
- ... that Ernest Bohr, who played field hockey for Denmark at the 1948 Summer Olympics, was the nephew of Olympic football player Harald Bohr, and the son of physicist Niels Bohr?
- Reviewed: HMS Wanderer (D74)
- Reviewed: HMS Wanderer (D74)
Created by Hawkeye7 (talk). Self nom at 20:53, 14 February 2013 (UTC).
- The article is long enough and was less than five days old when nominated. The hook is supported by two references, one online (regarding his Olympic play and his uncle) and the other a reliable offline source (regarding his father). The hook satisfies the applicable guidelines. There are a few questions/issues regarding sources: (1) The website www.ammentorp.org appears to be self-published and may not meet the guideline for a reliable source. The paragraph that it sources, on Bohr's wife and children, isn't really essential to the article, so if a reliable source can't be found, the solution may be to drop the paragraph. (2) The final text paragraph, regarding his service on several boards, isn't sourced. A source needs to be added. (3) When I click on the web page listed as the source for the first table, I don't see the information contained in the table. I assume the table must be derived from another source, so the citation should be changed to show the actual source. My other issues are: (4) The article seems to be relying too much on the tables to tell the story of what happened in the Olympic competition. Not all readers will be hockey fans who understand and can read the tables, so I recommend adding some additional text to explain in words some of the main information that currently is only shown in the tables. (5) While the first table is attractive, I'm actually not sure what the table represents. Although I may be able to guess, it shouldn't be necessary for the reader to guess what the table is showing. A title line should be added that clearly explains what the table is presenting. It would also be helpful if the table included notes that define the acronyms used in the column headings. Again, if this article is featured on the main page, the article should be made readable by those who aren't hockey fans. BRMo (talk) 05:19, 27 February 2013 (UTC)
- Ammentorp was self published, but it was written by a cousin. It is needed only as a source for his children, so I have dropped it.
- Added a source, which is the 1974 Kraks Blå Bog. A more recent edition would be handy here.
- Sourced the hockey results to the official Organising Committee report.
- Expanded the sentence on the 1948 games to a paragraph
- Added keys to explain the table entries. I didn't want to expand them out as the format is standardised across all the Olympic entries. Added a title line too.
- The article is long enough and was less than five days old when nominated. The hook is supported by two references, one online (regarding his Olympic play and his uncle) and the other a reliable offline source (regarding his father). The hook satisfies the applicable guidelines. There are a few questions/issues regarding sources: (1) The website www.ammentorp.org appears to be self-published and may not meet the guideline for a reliable source. The paragraph that it sources, on Bohr's wife and children, isn't really essential to the article, so if a reliable source can't be found, the solution may be to drop the paragraph. (2) The final text paragraph, regarding his service on several boards, isn't sourced. A source needs to be added. (3) When I click on the web page listed as the source for the first table, I don't see the information contained in the table. I assume the table must be derived from another source, so the citation should be changed to show the actual source. My other issues are: (4) The article seems to be relying too much on the tables to tell the story of what happened in the Olympic competition. Not all readers will be hockey fans who understand and can read the tables, so I recommend adding some additional text to explain in words some of the main information that currently is only shown in the tables. (5) While the first table is attractive, I'm actually not sure what the table represents. Although I may be able to guess, it shouldn't be necessary for the reader to guess what the table is showing. A title line should be added that clearly explains what the table is presenting. It would also be helpful if the table included notes that define the acronyms used in the column headings. Again, if this article is featured on the main page, the article should be made readable by those who aren't hockey fans. BRMo (talk) 05:19, 27 February 2013 (UTC)
