Talk:Sunil Kumar Verma/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: AntanO (talk · contribs) 10:08, 28 January 2015 (UTC)

Review

Well-written

The article respects copyrights laws. There is no spelling and grammar issues. But you may use {{British English}} at the talk page in order to avoid spelling confusion.

Thanks! Added at the top of article. Hope it is OK. Educationtemple (talk) 13:45, 30 January 2015 (UTC)

There is a bit of issues on prose's clear and concise. It says "He obtained his Masters degree...". But failed to mention what was the master degree or in which field. Mainly it does not clear that how many master degrees he obtained from the " G. B. Pant University of Agriculture and Technology" since the words say "Masters degree". Is it Master degree, Master degrees or Master's degree?

 Done Educationtemple (talk) 13:45, 30 January 2015 (UTC)

The line says "Verma then went on to receive his doctorate from the University of Oxford". But did not say was he able completed doctorate or not. If so, citation should be given.

 Done, see ref 14 Educationtemple (talk) 13:45, 30 January 2015 (UTC)

His poetry work on social issues such as the 2012 Delhi gang rape is not relevant to the heading, Education and career. If he was interesting on social work, it would be describe in a separate heading with more information.

 Done, created a new sub heading Educationtemple (talk) 13:45, 30 January 2015 (UTC)

No issue in layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation, but as per the above mention paragraph lead sections should develop further understanding.

 Done. Developed the lead as appropriate. Educationtemple (talk) 13:45, 30 January 2015 (UTC)

Verifiable with no original research

Citation need for "Verma was appointed as a scientist in the Centre for DNA Fingerprinting and Diagnostics". Otherwise, it might give "original research" view.

 Done, added relevant reference Educationtemple (talk) 13:45, 30 January 2015 (UTC)

Two dead links are found. One, Two

 Done, repaired the links Educationtemple (talk) 13:45, 30 January 2015 (UTC)

No other issues on Verifiable with no original research except the above.

Thanks! Educationtemple (talk) 13:45, 30 January 2015 (UTC)

Broad in its coverage

It would be good to describe a bit more about his bachelor degree(s) (other degrees too. eg: M.phil, etc) for better understanding about his educational background.

 Done. Clear detail added after referring through various sources Educationtemple (talk) 13:45, 30 January 2015 (UTC)

Coverage is not good at the point of GA. It would be better to elaborate more under the headings Universal primer technology and Awards and honors. Here you can describe more about the subjects rather than just giving as fact sheet. eg: Verma and Lalji Singh invented "universal primer technology", which allows identification of any unknown biological sample and its assignment to a known species source. Here you can tell about outcomes. Likewise, Universal primer technology could be elaborated in order to give a coverage about the matters that mentioned in the paragraph.

 Done to some extent. Please see. Educationtemple (talk) 13:45, 30 January 2015 (UTC)

In Awards and honors, you can describe more that why those awards and honors were given to him. Eg: "CSIR Technology Award for Life Sciences". Why it was given to him, what he has done to deserve it, etc. Likewise, if can give more about those awards and honors, that would give the clear picture to the readers.

 Done as it was done in Lalji Singh. Explained the reasons that enabled him to receive these awards in text in other relevant sections. Hope it is OK. Educationtemple (talk) 13:45, 30 January 2015 (UTC)

Neutral

Article's viewpoints are fairly and without bias.

Thanks! Educationtemple (talk) 13:45, 30 January 2015 (UTC)

Stable

It does not change significantly and no edit war or content dispute.

Thanks ! Educationtemple (talk) 13:45, 30 January 2015 (UTC)

Illustrated

Illustrated with images and audio files. Give meaningful caption to File:Lindau Honor2003.jpg that should relevant to the article.

 Done

Note

It is good know about a person and his contribution to the society. Unfortunately, the above mention points disqualify it to GA. I am sorry that I do not like to make anyone's disappoint. I am sure you should have spend your valuable time to make it good. However, I would like be a neutral reviewer. I would suggest to work on this article again as you did a good job for Lalji Singh. Work more on Broad in its coverage. I hope you can take it as courage, not disappointment. Good luck next time! --Anton^Talk 10:08, 28 January 2015 (UTC)

Thanks @AntanO:. It was indeed a pleasure to go through the article once again in light of your good suggestions! Thanks.Also, I have requested @Jim Carter: to copyedit the article once. As soon as it is ready, I shall ping you, so that you could have a review again....Cheers! Educationtemple (talk) 13:45, 30 January 2015 (UTC)