Talk:Sharissa/GA1
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Reviewer: Freikorp (talk · contribs) 02:09, 19 June 2018 (UTC)
- I'd clarify in the lead that her second album was only released in Japan
- "New York City's borough " - I'd unwikilink New York City as a common term and instead link all four words to Boroughs of New York City
- "Growing up, she felt stereotypical community pressure" - does the source indicate whether this pressure came from her own community or from those outside it?
- Can you indicate what genres Triple dose and 4Kast would be considered to fall into?
- "It reached number 46 on the" - are you referring to "I Tried" or "Miss My Lovin" here? I ask as I would have expected the lead single to chart higher, especially if it had a notable featured artist. If that isn't the case, perhaps mention in the prose that it didn't chart but the follow up single did.
- "to the 1996 compilation album, The Ultimate Mix" - is there any indication of what kind of compilation this was? "Bullet Proof Love" implies love songs; "Ultimate Mix" doesn't really imply anything.
- "she released "Keep It Simple" through Emotive Music" - was this a single or just a song? If just a song, did it get featured on any released recording?
- "Three of her songs appeared on the 2001 compilation album" - just clarifying, these are previously unreleased songs?
- Is there any indication of how Jimmy Henchman discovered her?
- "which was released on June 18, 2002" - seems a bit too specific, I would have just said 'released in June 2018', but up to you
- "The singer featured on The Ranjahz's "Animal Life", from the album Say What You Say, that year. The singer also played Yanesha" - I'd drop one of the two back to back sentences openers of 'The singer'
- Is there any explicit indication given of why her second album was only released in Japan?
- I could not find anything on this unfortunately (I can only find a few sources that talk about the album in general). In my opinion, it was probably due to the poor commercial performance of the singles, and the record label just released it in Japan to fulfill a contract and get rid of it. I have seen this Japan-only release done for other R&B artists oddly enough. Aoba47 (talk) 05:02, 19 June 2018 (UTC)
- I'm not sure if it's worth indirectly mentioning that the album's release date was pushed back a mere month, but up to you.
- Looks really good overall, looking forward to passing this once issues are addressed. Freikorp (talk) 02:09, 19 June 2018 (UTC)