Talk:Rupert Grint/GA1

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Reviewer: Queenieacoustic (talk) 17:08, 16 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I'll review this in the next couple of days. Queenieacoustic (talk) 17:08, 16 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Comments[edit]

Early life[edit]

Nothing here.

Career[edit]

Harry Potter (2001–2011)[edit]
  1. "Grint chose to try-out for the part of protagonists Ron Weasley," "Protagonists" should be in singular.
Done Crystal Clear x3 19:19, 17 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  1. "Grint won a Satellite Award, in the category of "Outstanding New Talent"," The first comma is disruptive and should be removed.
Done Crystal Clear x3 19:19, 17 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  1. "It did considerably better than the previous movie," 'Add "financially" after "better".
Done Crystal Clear x3 19:19, 17 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  1. "Between 2009-2010 his work received three nominations," Add a comma after "2009-2010".
Done Crystal Clear x3 19:19, 17 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  1. "However, by March 2007, he agreed to return for the last installments." Change "he" to "Grint".
Done Crystal Clear x3 19:19, 17 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  1. "Reviewing the adaption in Slate," "Slate" should be italicized.
Done Crystal Clear x3 19:19, 17 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  1. "Grint will reprise his role for the eight time in Harry Potter and the Deathly Hallows: Part 2," Typo. "Eight" should be "eighth".
Done Crystal Clear x3 19:19, 17 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  1. "whereas the first part had focussed more on character development." Typo. "Focussed" should be "focused".
Done Crystal Clear x3 19:19, 17 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  1. The caption for "Rupert Grint 2009.jpg" needs a punctuation.
Done Crystal Clear x3 19:19, 17 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Other work (2002–present)[edit]
  1. "Grint starred in his first non-Harry Potter movie: Thunderpants, a 2002 family film, which details around Patrick (played by Bruce Cook) whose remarkable capacity for flatulence scores him a job as an astronaut." There's two problems with this sentence. First, "Grint starred in his first non-Harry Potter movie: Thunderpants, a 2002 family film," is indigestable and should be reworded (for example, you could write "In 2002, Grint... etc). Second, by "details around", don't you mean "revolves around"?
Done Crystal Clear x3 19:34, 17 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  1. "Another of his films was Driving Lessons," This implies that Grint directed or in some way owned the film, which he did not. Needs to be rewritten.
Done Crystal Clear x3 19:34, 17 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  1. "Grint, on the other hand, is a revelation" and he "displays an innate naturalness mixed with personal charisma that turn a potentially pathetic" character into a more likable and comedic person, wrote ALT Film Guide's Andre Soares. He added that in the final confrontation between Ben and his, "Grint delivers his lines with such honesty that he makes them ring true. Only a veritably accomplished actor can manage such a feat." First of all, the italicized part seems a bit redundant, as the previous part sums up the reviewer's opinion about Grint's performance well. Also, why is "character into a more likable and comedic person" not included in the quote?
I've removed the last part. I did not include the other part in the quote because I reworded it from: "that turn a potentially pathetic Christian freak into a humorous, thoroughly likable — if more than a little awkward — young man caught between the dogmatic brainwashing perpetrated by his well-intentioned but psychopathic mother and his need to grow into his own person." I thought it was good to mention that the reviewer praised him for doing that with his character, but found it to be quite long. Crystal Clear x3 19:34, 17 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  1. "Principal photography started the following month and the project," What month? The previous sentence only mentions the year Grint was cast. Also, add a comma after "month".
Done Crystal Clear x3 19:34, 17 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  1. "This will be his first movie following the end of the Harry Potter series." This sentence has no reference. Also, as with number 2, "his first movie" implies that he somehow directed or owns the film.
Fixed Crystal Clear x3 19:34, 17 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

>====Personal life====

  1. "was actioned off on eBay.com in March 2010." Typo. "Actioned" should be "auctioned".
Done Crystal Clear x3 19:08, 17 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  1. "He was one of more than 40 participants to produce designs for Chrysalis Collection for Keech Hospice Care in London. His piece, a painted butterfly, was auctioned off on eBay.com in March 2010.[68]"
I wanted to add "Laura Devine, Keech fundraiser, said, “We are delighted Rupert has chosen to support his local hospice charity, especially because many of the children we care for are big fans of the Harry Potter star” [1]. While many other American big stars spend a lot of their time promoting larger charities concerned with world-wide social issues, Rupert promotes smaller local charities. This is not to say his charity work is not important; on the contrary, as Devine points out, his involvement with Keech is a testament to how his roles as a celebrity connects him with the children he is promoting. The character Rupert plays, Ron Weasley, makes it easier for the actor to build a closer relationship with his young fans. Also, the artwork he produced stresses a more hands on and personal approach than simply donating money. Rupert’s involvement in local and national charities affirms his down-to-earth and sweet reputation." Vandrea90 (talk) 15:47, 25 March 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  1. "In December 2011 Rupert Grint alongside Harry Potter co-star Tom Felton briefly appeared on ITV’s “Text Santa”, a program that aims to raise awareness and money for those more vulnerable during the holiday season [2]. They encouraged viewers to donate to this charity which continues to put smiles on sick children and their families’ faces. Their appearance, while brief, gives the program a strong foothold in promoting themselves and gaining more donators who are loyal to the actors." Vandrea90 (talk) 15:47, 25 March 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Filmography[edit]

Nothing here.

Awards[edit]

  1. Reference 60 uses a bare URL.
That was added by an IP. I have since removed it as it is not a RS. Crystal Clear x3 19:06, 17 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Lead[edit]

Nothing.

In conclusion[edit]

This article was a pleasure to read. I only found a couple of errors and typos, and I'm confident you'll have them fixed pretty soon. I'll put it on hold for seven days. Good luck! Queenieacoustic (talk) 12:03, 17 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks! I have addressed all of the issues above. Crystal Clear x3 19:34, 17 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Nice work! Pass. Queenieacoustic (talk) 08:26, 18 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  1. ^ http://www.fanpop.com/spots/rupert-grint/articles/45666/title/rupert-butterfly-artwork-set-benefit-adult-hospice-charity
  2. ^ http://www.rupertgrint.net/rupert-grint-tom-felton-support-text-santa-charity
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