Talk:Peruchazhi

GA Review

This review is transcluded from Talk:Peruchazhi/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 14:52, 3 March 2016 (UTC)

Will do this soon. JAGUAR  14:52, 3 March 2016 (UTC)

Initial comments

• "The film originally written in Tamil" - Originally written in Tamil, the film

 Done

• The middle two paragraphs in the lead definitely need to be merged into one

 Done

• "The film is about how Jagannathan a young politician from India" - how about The film revolves around Jagannathan, a young politician from India and his transition to chief political adviser or something like that. The sentence has no breaks and is very choppy

 Done

• United States is linked twice in lead

 Done

• "Sunny is forced to consult a third person's advise and calls Francis Kunjappan" - sounds like an actual third person here. How about Sunny is forced to consult advice from a third person and calls Francis Kunjappa

 Done

• "US" is linked twice in the Plot. The first instance of "US" should be changed to just "United States", and the second "US" delinked

 Done

• "They gives a message to Sunny" - give

 Done

• " but is not revealed that from where he got it" - I don't get this. Is it meant to be like but it is not revealed where he got it?

This means, it is not revealed on that scene, it is later shown on climax scene when, Jagannathan calls Sunny and reveals backstage dramas which occurred last night.

• "Meanwhile, Jagannathan and his pals returns to India" - informal. Use 'friends'

 Done

• "About the unique title, "The term Peruchazhi" - a colon is needed instead of a comma

 Done

• Europe is linked twice in the Release section. Does it even need to be linked?

 Done

• " in google play store in September 2014" - needs capitalisation

 Done

• "which the makers claims to be the first of its kind marketing method" - choppy. How about in which the film's makers claim to be the first of its kind in marketing

 Done

• The first paragraph in Soundtrack is unsourced

 Done

There are some prose issues and some confusing sentences, but once they're all addressed this could have a chance at meeting the criteria. JAGUAR  19:10, 3 March 2016 (UTC)

Comments from Kailash

• The filming and marketing sections may be split if possible.
• The refs need great cleanup.
• There can be more categories.
• "The Oscar nominee Bombay Jayashri had sung a song" - How relevant is that in "Casting"? Besides, the fact that she is an Oscar nominee should removed per WP:PUFFERY.
• All sources' authors must be in "Last name, first name" format. Some sources lack access date.

There are just some of the issues I cannot let the GA review overlook. More will come soon. Kailash29792 (talk) 11:08, 4 March 2016 (UTC)

Close - not listed

Kailash's comments haven't been addressed, and I think this is far off from meeting the criteria. I was very lenient on Bangalore Days, and I can't afford to do that again. Can you renominate it when it meets the criteria? JAGUAR  17:03, 7 March 2016 (UTC)

File:Peruchazhi movie poster.jpg

This file isn't used according to the rationale given on the image description page. There probably isn't a way this file could be used in conformity with WP:NFC anyway. Its use here is purely decorational; it isn't used to identify the subject (the on in the infobox is) and it's appearance isn't critically discussed. I suggest removing the image before or during the GA review (WP:GACR 6a). – Finnusertop (talk ⋅ contribs) 15:20, 3 March 2016 (UTC)

 Done Removed the Poster. JØ +TALK 16:20, 3 March 2016 (UTC)

References need cleanup

Most of the references have the first and last names of the authors reversed. For example, "last=V.P|first=Nicy" should be "first=V.P.|last=Nicy". If you want this to pass a GAN, it would be a good idea to fix those. – Jonesey95 (talk) 19:27, 8 March 2016 (UTC)

You are wrong. When it is written as "first=V.P.|last=Nicy", the result will be "Nicy, V.P." - this is not the right way. It should be like "V.P., Nicy". In bibliography, the last name should come first and the first name goes last. It's a commonly accepted bibliographical standard in literature. We follow that in Wikipedia referencing too. Hope you understand. --Charles Turing (talk) 11:06, 2 April 2016 (UTC)

Charles Turing, I'm confused--is V. P. the person's last name? Most people don't have initials for last names. Further, the article is inconsistent about this, referring to the writer as V.P. Nicy in the critical response section. Whatever is correct, adjustments need to be made, so Jonesey95 is correct on that point. Cyphoidbomb (talk) 18:39, 2 April 2016 (UTC)

Other examples including "Vijay, George" for the author named "Vijay George", and "Asha, Prakash", for the author named "Asha Prakash". Unless I'm missing something, these are simply incorrect and need to be swapped. – Jonesey95 (talk) 21:26, 2 April 2016 (UTC)

Nicy V. P is the correct name (checked it in IBTimes). The references are all messed up. No homogeneity. Someone should take the initiative to fix it. Let me see if I can manage that. --Charles Turing (talk) 11:13, 3 April 2016 (UTC)