Talk:People Take Pictures of Each Other/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 07:16, 5 August 2022 (UTC)

Good Article review progress box Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV () 3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant () Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

This is going to be reviewed today! --K. Peake 07:16, 5 August 2022 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

• Infobox looks good!
• Mention in the first sentence that it is from their sixth studio album, The Kinks Are the Village Green Preservation Society (1968)

• Done.

• Make the second sentence one mentioning the song's writing, singing and recording date

• Done.

• Follow the above with the inspiration, then one sentence of comp and lyrical meaning

• Done.

• Remove the sequencing sentence since that is not notable and the album can be mentioned in the first sentence

• Done.

• "The recording features a" → "The song features a" moving this to the comp/lyrics part like I said

• Done.

• Remove session keyboardist introduction to Nicky Hopkins

• Done.

• "and others comment that its" → "Others comment that its" to avoid a run-on sentence

• Done.

• "The Kinks performed the song" → "The Kinks performed "People Take Pictures of Each Other""

• Done.

Background and composition

• Quote box looks good!
• This section seems disordered; shouldn't you write about inspiration and its place on the album in background then follow with comp and lyrics of the song itself?

• Yeah, you're right it was a little out of order. I swapped paragraphs so the composition is discussed before its relation to the other songs on the album, which I think makes sense chronologically.

• "and Davies further stated in" → "and Davies eventually stated in"

• How about simply "... and Davies stated in ..."

• "encourage nostalgia while misleading" → "encourage nostalgia and mislead"

• Done.

• "Davies wrote it specifically" → "Davies wrote the song specifically"

• Done.

• Remove wikilink on "Pictures in the Sand"

• I think it's acceptable by WP:NSONG: Songs that do not rise to notability for an independent article should redirect to another relevant article, such as ... a prominent album ...

• "to photographs,[6] and" → "to photographs and" moving [6] solely to the end of the sentence

• Done.

• "where the latter features a" → "with the latter featuring a"

• Done.

• "it serves as a commentary on the album's other tracks," → "the song serves as a commentary on the other tracks,"

• Done.

• "thinks the song's closing lines" → "thinks the closing lines"

• Done.

Recording and release

• Audio sample looks good!
• Wikilink acoustic guitar

• Done.

• "and fast a breathless lead vocal" doesn't make much sense, unless you meant to write "a fast, breathless lead vocal"?

• Yes, that was a typo. Fixed.

• "rather than hiring session musicians to play it." → "rather than working with hiring session musicians." to be less repetitive

• How about ... rather than working with hired session musicians.

• Pipe coda to Coda (music)

• Done.

• Remove wikilink on Pye Records

• Done.

• "well without it."" → "well without it"." per MOS:QUOTE

• Done.

• "barely notice it."" → "barely notice it"."

• Done.

Other versions

• First para looks good!
• "The American rock band" → "American rock band" to avoid starting two consecutive sentences with the

• Done.

• "over time, adding in part:" → "over time, further adding:"

• Done.

References

• Copyvio score looks solid at 34.6%!!!
• Remove the author from ref 29 since staff is not a person

• Done.

Sources

• Pipe Overlook Press to The Overlook Press

• Done.

• Pipe Backbeat Books to UBM Technology Group

• Done.

Final comments and verdict

•  On hold until all of the issues are fixed! --K. Peake 08:08, 5 August 2022 (UTC)

• Thanks Kyle Peake, response above. Tkbrett (✉) 11:36, 5 August 2022 (UTC)

• ✓ Pass now, I understand your reasoning to not implement certain changes! --K. Peake 06:27, 6 August 2022 (UTC)