Talk:Omarska camp/GA1

GA Review[edit]

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Reviewer: Thurgate (talk · contribs) 14:27, 10 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for criteria)

It is reasonably well written.
prose: (MoS):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars etc.:
It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

Comments[edit]

1. and send them in the camps. Suggest - and send them to the camps

2. held on the area. Suggest - held in the area

3. The corpses of the inmates were spotted in front of the White House and the camp's guards continued to shooting rounds into them. Everyone was given an extra bullet that was shot in their heads. Suggest - The corpses of the inmates were spotted in front of the White House and the camp's guards continued to shoot rounds into them.

I've put the article on hold for seven days to allow you to address the issues I've brought up. Feel free to contact me on my talk page, or here with any concerns. Thurgate (talk) 14:27, 10 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Since you've left (3) unchanged I assume that you spotted that the text in italics was a quote from the evidence cited in the Stakic Judgement. I've added quotation marks to make it clearer to other readers. I've also revised the surrounding text that seems to have been taken from the Judgment but not verbatim to bring it a bit closer to current English.Opbeith (talk) 07:31, 14 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]