Talk:Omar Alghabra/Archive 1
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Not neutral
As currently written this article is not neutral. It credits Mr. Alghabra will federal investments in transit when he was an opposition member and the statement "(d)espite leaving Parliament Omar has continued to advocate on behalf of the residents of Mississauga-Erindale" with no balance seems like it came straight from a campaign brochure. - Pictureprovince (talk) 18:57, 15 March 2011 (UTC)
- I've restubbed the article to include only the basic, objective information, and to remove anything that smacks of POV. You're right to compare it to a campaign brochure; politicians of all political stripes (Conservative, Liberal, NDP, etc.) do have an unfortunate tendency to overwrite their Wikipedia articles with campaign PR fluff sometimes, and obviously we need to guard against that. Any article, frex, that talks about unquantifiable feelgoodisms like "he is committed to serving his community" (seriously, what politician would ever claim not to be?), or which repeatedly refers to its subject by his first name rather than his surname, needs to be checked and scrubbed. Bearcat (talk) 19:36, 21 March 2011 (UTC)
Alghabra's religion
I have had a look at the Larry Grossman (politician) article, and the introductory paragraph does not seem to contain the wording "..., a Jew, ..."; so I do not understand why Omar Alghabra's introduction needs to contain the wording "..., a muslim, ...", unless this somehow has something to do with his job. I reckon it doesn't, though. The cats at the foot of the page mention that he is Muslim, and that information is often included in infoboxes (although not here), but since it seemingly has nothing to do with Mr. Alghabra's public function (as surely as Larry Grossman's being Jewish had nothing to do with his), I deem this insertion inappropriate. For the user who wrote that, I have two points to make:
- ►You can reinsert the reference if – and only if – you can explain exactly why this is so important that it needs to be mentioned in the lead-off paragraph, unlike almost every other article about a Canadian public figure (and provide a reference, of course).
- ►The word Muslim is always written with an uppercase initial.