Talk:Not Commercial/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: SNUGGUMS (talk · contribs) 19:00, 23 January 2017 (UTC)

Seems rather short from a glance compared to other album articles, but I'll look deeper. Expect comments within one or two weeks. Snuggums (talk / edits) 19:00, 23 January 2017 (UTC)

Infobox

• "Folk rock" isn't supported within the article
• "Artist Direct" → Artistdirect

Lead

• See above note on Artistdirect
• "music critics" is a commonly recognized term and doesn't need to be linked per WP:OVERLINK
• "and that her writing skills were underrated" seems like it's missing "felt" right before "that"

Background

• The quote on poetry should come after the "she said about being inspired to write songs", and I'd try something like "she said of the tracks"
• this doesn't indicate It's a Man's World was her 21st album, so let's find another citation to establish album count for that as well as Believe and maybe
• "described the content of the album as being" → "described the album's content as"
• There was only one "Golden Ticket", not three
• No need to mention Mattel
• The quote is "bitter ballad", not "yearning ballad"

Composition

• I'm not so sure it's necessary to state track count in here; that's what tracklist sections are for
• "'Runnin is described by the singer as her 'in a nutshell, isn't it!'." needs a citation
• The source used for "With or Without You" and "Fit to Fly" doesn't support any of the assertions you've listed except for saluting soldiers, but I did find some support here for the "late-'80s" bit included on "Fit to Fly"
• The description for "Disaster Cake" could use something more specific, namely what Cher was saying about this past girlfriend
• I made a slight adjustment to fit a full quote

Reception

• Only three reviews? Even for something that didn't have a commercial release (hence its title), this seems rather short.
• "not.com.mercial received positive reviews from music critics" is a violation of WP:SYNTH without a citation specifically supporting this assertion; you can't just form a conclusion solely based on a few samples.
• "rated the album as B−" → "gave the album a B− rating"
• "sullen, mid-tempo bunch, modestly hooky at best" actually applies to the album's tracks as a whole, not just the Cobain tribute

Controversy

• Sgt. Pepper's needs to be italicized as it is an album
• "she wanted to be a nun when she attended Catholic school as a child, and said she has known" is blatantly plagiarized from MTV; absolutely unacceptable

Track listing

• While it might be harder to do without an iTunes release, this section does need a citation, particularly for the song durations

Personnel

• AllMusic says that Bruce Roberts and Cher were composers, not producers

References

• See above note on Artistdirect
• "Detriot Metro Times" → Metro Times
• I'm not sure if "The Daily Vault" is a good source to use

Overall

• Prose: Copyright violations are an automatic fail, and other parts could also use work
• Referencing: One questionable source, and many instances of text not being supported by given citations
• Coverage: One song description and perhaps the "reception" section as a whole could use more development. Given the "Golden ticket" contest in the album's copies, is anything available on sales even if it was a really low figure? I would also indicate whether Cher promoted this album at all.
• Neutrality: As far as I can tell, this is free of bias
• Stability: Seems fine to me
• Media: Album cover has an appropriate FUR
• Verdict: Sorry, but I'm failing this without putting it on hold mainly due to prose and referencing issues. It could also probably be expanded somewhat, even if there's only a limited amount of material available on this compared to her other work. Better luck next time. Snuggums (talk / edits) 23:01, 29 January 2017 (UTC)