Talk:New Rules/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 21:34, 4 September 2017 (UTC)

Soon Cartoon network freak (talk) 21:34, 4 September 2017 (UTC)

Lead

• The song was written → say "The track" here as you have already written "song" before
• and produced by the latter → sounds better: while production was handled by the latter
• and Ireland on 18 August 2017. It has peaked → and Ireland, while peaking within (date is not needed in the lead)
• peaking so far at number 74 → For the future: make sure to remove "so far" after the song reached its final peak  Done Ok!
• The song's music video → An accompanying music video for the song

Infobox

• The cover artwork needs alternative text
• State only "Kirkpatrick" in "Producer(s)"

Background and composition

• self-titled debut studio album → eponymous debut studio album
• extended process lead her to write and record songs → extended process led to her writing and recording songs
• and "It's about → and that "it's about
• through the iTunes Store → on iTunes

Critical reception

• called it a "breakup anthem" → also called the song a "breakup anthem"
• wrote that the record starts → "record" is generally used for albums, so please state "recording" here  Comment: "record" refers to the album; I changed "record" to "Dua Lipa" to avoid confusion

Commercial performance

• first chart-topping song in the UK. → write out to "United Kingdom"
• the following week.[34] It received a → the following week,[34] and received
• certification in the UK → remove "in the UK"
• "New Rules" has peaked within the top ten → add "further" before "peaked"
• It has so far peaked at number 74 → take my advice for the future from the lead  Done Ok!
• On the week of 4 September, it reached → use "New Ruled" here for alternation

Music video

• Henry Scholfield, who also directed → use "shot" here for alternation
• a group of flamingos into the clip because → a group of flamingos into the clip, as
• because "[The Confidante] → because "[The Confidante's]
• The video stars → The video starts
• In addition to this, the track's commercial success has been attributed to the popularity of the visual.[52][53] → You already said that, so please remove it here
• So Aliza Abarbanel of Refinery29 said → Aliza... commented on the visual,
• labeled → labelled
• Link "gay" to homosexuality
• on her YouTube account → put this after "visual"

Credits and personnel

• Unlink "Dua Lip"

Charts

• Flawless ;)

Certifications

• Flawless ;)

Release history

• Flawless ;)

Other stuff

Copy-violation

• 45.1% is too much! Please remove content from the top source  Done Reduced the content from the former top source to 36.7%

References

• As far as I checked them, the references do cover the assertations made in this article

Outcome

• You've got some writing skills, you gotta tell them to yourself. I put this  On hold; you got 7 days, I'll count 'em... Best regards, Cartoon network freak (talk) 09:54, 6 September 2017 (UTC)

@Cartoon network freak: I gotta tell them to myself Haha. I have addressed your comments! Thank you so much for reviewing this article, I appreciate it greatly Regards, --Paparazzzi (talk) 17:05, 6 September 2017 (UTC)

• Gladly passing this! Congrats, Cartoon network freak (talk) 17:50, 6 September 2017 (UTC)

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