Talk:Mulhim Ma'n

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GA Review[edit]

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 21:26, 9 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

"their grip over" control? Bit more neutral tone.

Revised. Al Ameer (talk) 16:32, 10 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

"in 1636. In 1657" repetitive.

1636 was an error actually, removed. Al Ameer (talk) 16:32, 10 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

"tax farmer" what's one of those?

I could tell you it's not of the Ol' MacDonald variety. Should I explain this a bit in the lead or the term's first mention in the body?

"of the Chouf who" if you're not saying Chouf region, shouldn't this just be "of Chouf who"?

In the sources it is always introduced as "the Shuf" or "the Chouf". Similar to "the Galilee" or "the Rockys". Al Ameer (talk) 16:32, 10 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

"Grand Duke of Tuscany" is there a link for this?

Thought that the linking of Grand Duchy of Tuscany would suffice, but linked the title Grand Duke of Tuscany anyway. Al Ameer (talk) 16:32, 10 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

"southern Beqaa Valley was" overlinked.

Fixed. Al Ameer (talk) 16:32, 10 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

"a one year term' one-year.

Fixed. Al Ameer (talk) 16:32, 10 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

"governor of Tripoli.[17]" tripoli overlnked.

Fixed. Al Ameer (talk) 16:32, 10 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

"taxes in Keserwan, the" overlinked.

Fixed. Al Ameer (talk) 16:32, 10 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

"of Safed, which" overlinked.

Fixed. Al Ameer (talk) 16:32, 10 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

"and the Shia Muslim Hamade" overlinked.

Fixed. Al Ameer (talk) 16:32, 10 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

"later succeeded Bashir" unreferenced.
First biblio entry needs an en-dash in the year range.

Fixed. Al Ameer (talk) 16:32, 10 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

As does Olsaretti.

Fixed. Al Ameer (talk) 16:32, 10 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

That's all I have. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 08:56, 10 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks The Rambling Man. Almost finished. Need to add that citation for Bashir's succession. Otherwise, just let me know about the tax farm explanation. Al Ameer (talk) 16:32, 10 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

I think tax farmer needs a footnote, referenced of course, to explain to people like me who haven't got a clue! The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 10:12, 12 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

@The Rambling Man: Done! Al Ameer (talk) 04:18, 13 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]