Talk:Milla Jovovich/GA1

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GA Review[edit]

I really enjoyed reading this; Jovovich is a personal favorite of mine, so it's awesome to see her article in such great shape. It passes all of the Good Article Criteria in that it is well written for the most part, it is factually accurate and verifiable, it is comprehensive, neutral and stable and well illustrated with properly tagged images. I have various nitpicky suggestions and comments, however, in order to improve the prose and readability to better fulfill the first criteria:

  • In the infobox, emdashes (—) are used instead of endashes (–); it should be the other way around per WP:DASH.
 Done Fixed. -Lindsey8417 (talk) 23:51, 3 February 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • "reigning queen of kick-butt" is a fantastic quote, but it's not in the body of the article; the lead is supposed to be an overview. Could this be placed somewhere in the body, as well as in the lead?
 Done I added a short "In the media" section which should expand later but seems fine now as it is. I added that quote and some info about her sort of "Geek" following. -Lindsey8417 (talk) 23:51, 3 February 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Jovovich has been featured in numerous high profile modeling campaigns as well as in Hollywood films: this sentence is not really necessary since this is explicitly stated later on.
 Done Fixed. -Lindsey8417 (talk) 23:51, 3 February 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Jovovich had began modeling at eleven: remove "had"
 Done Fixed. -Lindsey8417 (talk) 23:51, 3 February 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • and she continues her career with more notable campaigns: past tense, "continued". Also, "more notable" is confusing because it's not clear whether it is meant that the following campaigns were more notable than the previously stated one, or if these campaigns were as notable; "other notable", perhaps?
 Done Changed to the past tense, and "other notable". -Lindsey8417 (talk) 23:51, 3 February 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Jovovich has gone on to say that: "has gone on to say" is used incorrectly here, since nothing is quoted from her before this; "has stated"?
 Done Changed to Jovovich has stated that. -Lindsey8417 (talk) 23:51, 3 February 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Jovovich was among other models who gained controversy for partaking in the industry at a young age: "partaking" is odd here; "becoming involved"?
 Done Fixed. -Lindsey8417 (talk) 23:51, 3 February 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Jovovich finished as the best pupil, as she did in the ballet school: this is somewhat confusing. Was she enrolled in a ballet school the same time as the Professional Actors school? Further explanation may be needed here.
 Done I have removed the statement as there is no way for me to be able to check it. The reference is from a book and the book itself is in Serbian.
  • She continued to act and in 1988...: in what? Plays?
 Done She continued to act and in 1998... -Lindsey8417 (talk) 23:51, 3 February 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • This sequel to The Blue Lagoon (1980) placed her opposite Brian Krause, in the romance and adventure film: the phrasing is somewhat confusing. Is "romance and adventure film" necessary?
 Done Removed. -Lindsey8417 (talk) 23:51, 3 February 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Is there a reason why 'Best Young Actress Starring in a Motion Picture' and 'Worst New Star' are using apostrophes instead of quotation marks?
 Done Just a mistake. Fixed. -Lindsey8417 (talk) 23:51, 3 February 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • science fiction action film The Fifth Element, along side Bruce Willis and Gary Oldman: "alongside"
 Done Fixed. -Lindsey8417 (talk) 23:51, 3 February 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • She also appeared in the music video for Lenny Kravitz song: for the Kravitz song?
 Done Fixed. -Lindsey8417 (talk) 23:51, 3 February 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Directed by Wim Wenders, Jovovich starred along side Jeremy Davies and Mel Gibson: "alongside" again.
 Done Fixed. -Lindsey8417 (talk) 23:51, 3 February 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • and Japan on August 31, 2002: is Japan's release date noteworthy?
I would think it was, since Resident Evil was based from the video game which was a Japanese franchise. I re-wrote a portion to say that it was released as Biohazard in Japan to match the Japanese naming of the video game. If you think that isn't noteworthy still, I'll remove it. -Lindsey8417 (talk) 23:51, 3 February 2008 (UTC)[reply]
I see where you're coming from, and I wouldn't protest its inclusion for now. Although it's based on a Japanese franchise, the film is a German/British production (according to the article, anyway), so I could see people arguing that Japan's release date is less notable than others. María (habla conmigo) 00:27, 4 February 2008 (UTC)[reply]
You're right, the Japanese release isn't as notable. I'll remove it. -Lindsey8417 (talk) 00:49, 4 February 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • She had accepted the role of Alice because she and her brother had been fans of the video game franchise: change "she" to "Jovovich" since it's not clear at first whether you're talking about the actor or the character.
 Done Fixed. -Lindsey8417 (talk) 23:51, 3 February 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • and had partaken in karate, kick-boxing and combat-training: perhaps change to "and had trained in karate, kick-boxing and combat"?
 Done Fixed. -Lindsey8417 (talk) 23:51, 3 February 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • The role of Fangora in Dummy, brought Jovovich together in film with Oscar-winning friend Adrien Brody: no comma. Also, I'm not sure what is meant by "brought together in film". Had they met before then? Is this how they became friends?
 Done Changed to: allowed Jovovich to act in film with Oscar-winning Adrien Brody, who was a friend previous to filming. -Lindsey8417 (talk) 23:51, 3 February 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Sounds good, but change "previous" to "prior". María (habla conmigo) 00:27, 4 February 2008 (UTC)[reply]
 Done Fixed. -Lindsey8417 (talk) 00:49, 4 February 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • In the role, Jovovich found an ability to identify with the character because Fangora possessed the most similar qualities to the actresses real life than previous roles: Rewrite as: "Jovovich found it easy to identify with this role because she felt Fangora, as opposed to previous characters, possessed similar qualities to the actress's own life."
 Done Fixed. -Lindsey8417 (talk) 23:51, 3 February 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • The role required her to partake fight training for three hours a day: replace "partake" with "do".
 Done Fixed. -Lindsey8417 (talk) 23:51, 3 February 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • She noted during an interview that year, her large action films "have [her] commercial part [of her career] taken care of, and for [her] artistic side, [she] make independent little films that never come out" and "It's a good balance".: this is really jumbled and difficult to read with all of the brackets. Perhaps paraphrase the first quotation ("She noted during an interview that year that her large action films... etc etc) and then include the last quote about it being "a good balance".
 Done Re-worded: She noted during an interview that year that her large action films take care of the commercial part of her career, while she acts in "independent little films that never come out" to appease her artistic side, and "It's a good balance" -Lindsey8417 (talk) 23:51, 3 February 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • was a combination of Jovovich's parent's names - the first two letters of mother Galina and the first two letters of father Bogie's: replace dash with —
 Done Fixed. -Lindsey8417 (talk) 23:51, 3 February 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Great, great work. Once these issues are taken care of, I'll pass the article so it can go on to bigger and better things! María (habla conmigo) 17:02, 3 February 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Yay, that was done long before I thought. So, I'll expand the "In the media" section a bit either now, or after the review is passed - when I have the time. Thanks for reviewing! -Lindsey8417 (talk) 23:51, 3 February 2008 (UTC)[reply]
That was quick! Congrats on your newest Good Article and I hope to see this at FAC one day. :) Let me know if it goes that route; I'd be happy to review it again. María (habla conmigo) 01:04, 4 February 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Great! If it ever gets to that point, you'll be the first on Wikipedia to know. Thanks so much. -Lindsey8417 (talk) 01:09, 4 February 2008 (UTC)[reply]
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