Talk:Luton/Archives/2007/January

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Re-write

Having read though the article today there are many disjointed facts stated. In places particularly the opening paragraphs this does not really flow terribly well. The intro probably should be cut with much of the info dropping down the article. GazMan7 16:33, 17 November 2006 (UTC)

I have started to re-organise the article, any ideas/suggestions/help gratefully appreciated.GazMan7 10:52, 25 January 2007 (UTC)

GA Fail

  • {{Fact}} tags
  • Expand lead to two paragraphs
  • Too many short stubby section with one or two sentences, and no reference
  • The first section has two images squashing all the text, move one down.
  • References come after punctuation, not before so [6]. should be .[6]
  • Don't wikilink solo years, ex 1235
  • Trivia is unencyclopedic and needs to be removed or merged with the rest of the text
  • basic prices published, external link in the text
  • Local media, external links in the text
  • Local attractions, don't list articles that don't exist
  • External links come after references
  • References aren't formatted properly, please check {{cite web}}
  • References 17-20 are not references

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You may wish to browse through User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Needs a lot of work to be a GA, M3tal H3ad 11:17, 25 January 2007 (UTC)