Talk:Laurence Zitvogel

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@Castelamfr: Nice start on your draft. I changed the layout on the section headers to remove the ":" at the end and to format the heading as "Heading" rather than "Subheading 1" in keeping with the usual style for Wikipedia articles. You should only use "Subheading" levels under a "Heading" level section.

A few other things - it's normal to start with "Early life and education" (or just "Education", if you don't have information that fits "Early life"), rather than "Personal life", which would normally go further down the page. After "Early life and education" the typical sections are "Career", "Research interests" and "Awards and honors". Sticking to a standard layout for biographies is a good idea. Wikipedia style does not include honorifics - so leave out the "Dr" and just use their full name, or their surname when you refer to them.

I also think longer paragraphs are better. Single-sentence paragraphs feel very choppy, especially when there are several of them. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 20:39, 22 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Further feedback[edit]

Castelamfr, here are several issues for your awareness so that others don't have to correct these in your future work:

MOS:DATESNO Dates on Wikipedia do use the nth formulation. [1]
MOS:HONORIFIC see Wikipedia usage on "Dr." etc. [2]
Please take care to provide citation information; here, the author was incorrect, the dates and accessdate should be provided (and I added the missing punctuation at the end of the sentence). [3]
After a full name is provided, it isn't repeated in subsequent sections (I also filled in more missing punctuation and some of the missing citation information). [4]
Refs follow the punctuation directly, without a space.[5]
The citation template will add the quote for you: double removed. [6]
The article title here was incorrect-- the article is in French. Added trans-title (for the translation), the language, and the correct title. [7]
Hoffman is described in his own article: [8] Here I also removed the extra space before the ref, and completed another sentence fragment.

I spent almost an hour on this, so hope that this summary will be helpful to you in future work. Summary of changes. I did not take the time to finish completing all the incomplete citations, and there are still some grammar issues. SandyGeorgia (Talk) 01:20, 26 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

I did a bit more citation cleanup. If we don’t provide complete information on citations, it can be hard in the future to recover sources if websites go dead. That’s why complete citations matter ... and we need accessdate to find sources that change in the internet archive. SandyGeorgia (Talk) 05:30, 26 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]