Talk:Johann Lamont/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Coemgenus (talk · contribs) 15:51, 21 February 2014 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose, no copyvios, spelling and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

I'll start this review today or tomorrow. --Coemgenus (talk) 15:51, 21 February 2014 (UTC)

Images

• Images and their captions are fine, both creative commons shots from Flickr, tagged correctly.

Lede

• Good summary, but one minor point: "convener" could use a link (I'd never heard the word before).

•  Done

Early life and teaching career

• "The family were churchgoers..." Any particular denomination?

• She was identified here as Roman Catholic, but I can find no reliable sources to confirm whether or not this is the case.

• OK. If you ever find such a source, it would be useful, but that's good enough for now, I guess.

• "...was a representative on the Scottish Constitutional Convention..." adding the year would help place this event in the chronology better.

•  Done. The SCC was established in 1989, but I've yet to find a source that mentions her in the context of an exact year. The best seems to be one that references her in terms of the decades it was sitting.

• And is there any indication why the unusual spelling of her name? Is it a Gaelic thing, or just her parents' preference?

• I believe it's a Gaelic language version of Joanna, but sadly no reliable sources for this.

• OK. Again, if you find one, that's great, but if not, no problem.

MSP for Glasgow Pollok

• "travellers" and "gypsies" could use a link. Especially travellers -- many non-UK people will be unfamiliar with the term.

•  Done

...That's all for now, I'll review more later.

Thanks for your comments so far. I've addressed what I can for now, but will keep looking, and look forward to reading the rest of your review. Cheers Paul MacDermott (talk) 17:31, 22 February 2014 (UTC)

Leadership election

• Were there any policy differences that separated Lamont from Harris and MacIntosh?

•  Done. Paragraphs also slightly re-organised for hopefully a better flow.

First months in office

• You write of the "'huge challenge' of rebuilding public trust in Scottish Labour". Was there something in particular Labour had done to lose the public trust, or was it just a matter of having lost the last election or two?

•  Done. There was a general decline in support for Labour over the previous decade, which she seems to attribute to their failure to engage with the electorate. I've expanded this a little, but I'll see if I can find more on it, perhaps another report about the interview.

• At first glance the Guardian piece seems to be the only one about this, but I'll keep looking.

Falkirk candidate selection row and Grangemouth dispute

• "...proposed a survival plan requiring employees to accept worse employment terms..." Do you mean reduced pay? Changes in work rules? It's kind of unclear.

•  Done

• That's all I could find to ask about. This is a well-done article, which is often a difficult task with an active politician. Nice work! --Coemgenus (talk) 15:31, 23 February 2014 (UTC)

• This is the first political bio I've taken through GAN, so thanks for the support. I should have everything dealt with now, but let me know if there's anything else. Thanks once again for the review. Paul MacDermott (talk) 19:19, 23 February 2014 (UTC)

• Yes, that all looks good to me. Passed! --Coemgenus (talk) 20:23, 23 February 2014 (UTC)

• Fantastic, thanks again. Paul MacDermott (talk) 20:56, 23 February 2014 (UTC)