Talk:Goodies (Ciara album)/GA1

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Reviewer: — Legolas (talk2me) 08:07, 13 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Hi Candyo32, I will review Goodies according to the GA criteria. — Legolas (talk2me) 08:07, 13 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Can you start by replacing all the normal dashes with en-dash? Thanks — Legolas (talk2me) 05:52, 17 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Here's the real deal

  • lead - Ciara's talents were noticed --> by whom?
 Done
  • through the lead, title single -> use any one adjective
 Done
  • female crunk counterpart to "Yeah" and "Freek-a-Leek" --> mention the artists and the year in braces
 Done
  • With Ciara hailed as the "Princess or First Lady of Crunk&B", the album uses dance music while utilizing pop, R&B, and hip-hop influences. --> Try to rephrase this. Doesnot seem clear tying up the title with the composition.
 Done but it still seems kind of iffy. Do you have a wording suggestion?
  • contridictory ??
 Done, fixed spelling
  • independent lyrics --> ?? you meant "promoting female empowerment and independence in the lyrics of the title track"??
 Done, independent--->independence, among other wording changes.
  • Most contemporary critics --> contemporary is a redundant word here as an album of 2004 will have contemporary critics reviewing it.
 Done
  • Come to think of it, you haven't linked the title track anywhere in the lead
 Done
  • 2.7. million ?? what is that extra dot doing there?
 Done
  • The second peaked at the top spot in Canada --> I don't follow
The singles are listed. Goodies is first then 1,2 Step, and therefore in the next sentence it says "the second" meaning 1,2 Step. Candyo32 23:07, 19 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]
It looks pretty abrupt. I advice changing it to "The second single" to be prompt.
  • After leaving the recently created group Hearsay, at fifteen, Atlanta native Ciara earned a writing job, via her manager, for Atlanta's Tricky Stewart and The-Dream's RedZone Entertainment, penning songs for Mýa and Fantasia among others — over usage of commas. Try something like "After leaving the group Hearsay at the age of fifteen, Atlanta native Ciara earned a writing job via her manager, for Atlanta's Tricky Stewart and The-Dream's RedZone Entertainment, penning songs for Mýa and Fantasia among others."
 Done
  • On Ciara, Jazze Pha -> About Ciara
 Done
  • Atlanta's Ludacris and T.I.. -> there's two full-stops. Why?
Period after the I in T.I. and then the period, I assume this is right?
  • When talking about the album, Ciara said it was universal --> An album can't be universal, rather its theme
 Done
  • before being dethroned by the future Diamond-certified album Confessions, by labelmate and fellow Atlanta resident Usher, coincidentally including the titular track's male counterpart, "Yeah." — This is a strong example of WP:PEACOCK and WP:UNDUE.
 Done
  • certified 3x Platinum by -> We don't use such linguistics. Use three-times instead.
 Done
  • Also, for the certifications, include the number of albums shipped to be precise about the sales.
Removed "sales" since sales totals are unknown for each territory.
  • remaining to be Ciara's sole certification in the UK --> becoming Ciara's sole certified album in UK.
 Done
  • Sales and certifications --> Correct usage of &times format
??
Instead of using 2x platinum it should be 2× platinum.
  • Chart (2004–2005) --> Chart (2004–05)
 Done
  • I think you can easily incorporate the single release date in the article, hence it would reduce another unnecessary section.
Well, I think the section is worthwhile as it includes more than the single release dates and goes into detail about the singles, just like The Fame#Singles (aware this is WP:OTHERSTUFF, just noting it)
You did not get me. I mean there is a section called Release history where there is only one date. You can easily incorporate the date in the article, hence you won't need the section. An article should always have the least possible sections. — Legolas (talk2me) 03:31, 22 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Lol, now I feel stupid. It takes a while for things to sink in and I understand. Haha. I just removed the section and moved the ref up. Candyo32 19:12, 22 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  • Correct online sources and printed sources. Online sources like Slant magazine should not be italicized.
 Done
 Done Candyo32 00:42, 22 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]

These are all the issues. 06:39, 21 September 2010 (UTC) — Legolas (talk2me) 06:41, 21 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Waiting for you to complete them. Then it can pass. — Legolas (talk2me) 03:31, 22 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]
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