Talk:Eric Lock/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MisterBee1966 (talk · contribs) 16:11, 3 December 2012 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Comments by MisterBee1966

Lead

• "Lock had his first taste of flying as a teenage but showed little further interest in flying until 1939" I find this a bit too colloquial! Maybe start with where and when he was born.
• "He joined the RAF": first use of RAF should not be abbreviated
• "offensive sweeps": is this a well known term for a offensive fighter patrols? Maybe link to combat air patrol?
• nickname "Sawn Off Lockie": is not cited

Battle of Britain

• link first use of Luftwaffe
• "Lock flew as Red 2" is that a position or his aircraft?
• "Lock followed it down. He quickly realised his mistake but it was too late." Why was it a mistake. Too colloquail I think

Last battles and death

• "well-known RAF aces" well known to whom? Could be seen as POV

List of victories

• (JG 54 — or Fighter Wing 54) and others: strike the or

Ok done. Dapi89 (talk) 22:13, 7 December 2012 (UTC)

Early life and career

• last sentence, 2nd paragraph not referenced

Last battles and death

• 2nd paragraph not referenced

Channel Front

• 1st paragraph not referenced