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"in favour of synonymising it with the contemporaneous A. afarensis". At least for the lead, would it be possible to have this in more accessible language? "synonymising" specifically.
Off the top of my head 'in favour of grouping it together with (synonymising)'.
"The validity of A. bahrelghazali has not been widely accepted, in favour of classifying the specimens as A. afarensis, a better known Pliocene australopithecine from East Africa" User:Dunkleosteus77 |push to talk 16:43, 3 September 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Yes. Good.
"from 3 partial jawbones". "3" → 'three' per MoS.
I like using numbers over spelling because my brain can more easily identify them User:Dunkleosteus77 |push to talk 15:58, 3 September 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Personally, so do I. But the MoS doesn't and a GAN is only about the nominator's personal preferences in so far as they don't conflict with policy or guidelines.
It's not a dealbreaker at GAN, but you are quite likely to get an irritating drive by edit which you won't be able to revert. Still, that's not what we're here for.
"and likewise predominantly ate C4 savanna foods" Likewise? Likewise to what?
it inhabited a grassland, so it does make sense that it mostly ate foods that commonly grow on savanna User:Dunkleosteus77 |push to talk 15:58, 3 September 2020 (UTC)[reply]
It does indeed. But "likewise" means that something is like something; not that one thing follows from another.
Hmm. Looks hard at "the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience" and decides to let it go. I think that most readers will be able to puzzle it out.
"process so much in the way of C4 plants". So much as what?
"In 1995, a jawbone preserving the premolars, canines, and the right second incisor (KT12/H1, "Abel") as well as an isolated first upper premolar (KT12/H2)". Could the parentheses be removed and the contents be unpacked a little, for the non-specialist reader? I know that you do this later, but it would seem to me to make things more user friendly to do it at first mention.
Hypothesis; theory; idea; argument; premise; view; even assumption.
"At present". Optional: → 'As of 2020'.
if it ever gets fixed, that would be very significant and article would be updated accordingly User:Dunkleosteus77 |push to talk 15:58, 3 September 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"with each other over other hominin genera." I find the last four words confusing to the point that I don't know what you are trying to say. (This may just be me.)
"rather than how close they are to each other in the hominin family tree" User:Dunkleosteus77 |push to talk 15:58, 3 September 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"Unlike A. afarensis, the alveolar part of the jawbone where the tooth sockets are is almost vertical as opposed to oblique, poorly developed superior transverse torus and moderate inferior torus (two ridges on the midline of the jaw on the tongue side), and thin enamel on the chewing surface of the premolars." is there a word - eg 'possesses' - missing immediately before "poorly" here?
"despite 55–80% of δ13C deriving from C4 sources". In English please.
A carbon isotope analysis analyzes where carbon came from (specifically, from what primary producer), and 55–80% of δ13C derived from C4 plant sources User:Dunkleosteus77 |push to talk 15:58, 3 September 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"USOs" Abbreviations should be given in full at first mention.
"Reduncinae, Alcelaphinae, and Antilopinae, whereas Tragelaphini". Could this be rendered more accessible? Perhaps by translating to English and giving the specialist terms, Wikilinked, in brackets after each mention?
"Koro Toro, during Mega-Chad events (which has been cyclical for the last 7 million years)". "has" → 'have'. (The reference here is to the events, not to the lake.) Or rephrase to avoid this.
Nice article. I enjoyed that. Gog the Mild (talk) 13:00, 3 September 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Looking good. A few comments on your comments above. If I haven't commented I am happy with your response. Gog the Mild (talk) 16:32, 3 September 2020 (UTC)[reply]
A fine job of reducing a sprawling mess of date and theory to a tight and comprehensible article. Promoting. Gog the Mild (talk) 17:09, 3 September 2020 (UTC)[reply]